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Haiku 64 About the Tempest

a lone ship fades in morn's mist the mast breaks or a lone ship fades in the mist tidal wave 3/4/3-contemporary haiku

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/23/2015 9:34:00 AM

a master!!!wow>love Charm

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/23/2014 2:08:00 PM

very beautifully painted charmaine truly excellent piece

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/23/2014 8:52:00 AM

wow, not such a happy ending, well said, you never know the wrath until it is upon you ;)

Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/20/2014 6:10:00 PM

I do love a haiku :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/14/2014 8:22:00 PM

Oh yes much much better both! smooch!! L & L

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/14/2014 4:51:00 PM

K little one - your line 1 is the single line, it could be more explicitly sensory, the leap/aha is between your line 1 & the 2 line part which is fine!!! [the raft angles down][ the mast breaks] - see how that SHOWS a bad storm without saying tempest? [mountains of waves] Light & Love

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 8/14/2014 6:18:00 PM

Hi ma ,thanks for the advice..Yes 'To show and not tell'..I got ir.Thanks for the advice,yes much better dear-mountains of hugs:.)

James Fraser

Date: 8/8/2014 3:13:00 PM

Many a ship never met the Tempest's match. The deep being the winner, the sea's final catch. Fine poetry, yep :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/6/2014 6:50:00 PM

wow, you are on a roll. Those are BOTH very good haiku. I am impressed. You gotta do more.