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Haiku 49

	rainy season 
	grief, white hydrangeas 
	hungry caterpillar

In part, The Haiku Society of America’s definition of a haiku reads, “Usually a haiku in English is written in three unrhymed lines of seventeen or fewer syllables.” Further, Japanese scholar Shigehisa Kuriyama states, “The 5-7-5 pattern by itself does not make a haiku.” (Gurga, p. 1). Contemporary English language haiku have departed radically from the 5-7-5 convention, including the Beat haiku of Jack Kerouac, Allen Ginsberg, and Gary Snyder, the latter awarded the Masaoka Shiki International Haiku Grand Prize in 2004. The haiku of Robert Spiess are especially experimental.

I recommend two sources for further study of haiku: “Haiku: A Poet’s Guide,” by Lee Gurga, addresses haiku in it’s traditional form; “Haiku Poetics in Twentieth-Century Avant-Garde Poetry,” by Jeffery Johnson discusses haiku as realized by modernist poets.  

Speaking personally, it is most important for me to enjoy writing a haiku, correct form or not, and for my haiku to be enjoyed by the reader.

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  1. Date: 10/21/2014 9:09:00 AM
    Lively,beautiful.Thanks for the creation.

  1. Date: 7/24/2013 3:10:00 PM
    I am glad to see that you DO have an academic background with your haiku. we really need that around here. Love the third line of this one.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/24/2013 3:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    As I said to PD, it just sneaks in, and not just here. I have to fight against it elsewhere in my life, especially when I'm writing... Jack
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 8:24:00 PM
    amazing Jack... I am happy you enjoy writing haiku... xox~ Linda

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 5/18/2013 9:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I don't intend to be pretentious; my academic background sometimes takes hold, leading inevitably to research. I do enjoy the form, but I'm very much a newbie... Jack
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 12:08:00 AM
    jack, I really enjoyed this. Both your poem as well as the fact that you recognize that a haiku does not have to be that standard type (though I sure do enjoy doing it that way anyway!) the new way does not give you enough syllables to play with!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 5/18/2013 9:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    And play is what it's all about...
  1. Date: 5/17/2013 7:56:00 PM
    You write everything with such powerful imagery. Great Haiku!

  1. Date: 5/16/2013 9:12:00 AM
    That's interesting about white representing death... didn't know that. Well in Japanese culture it's okay to wear white at a funeral! Black or white... but I don't believe many other colors are taken well...

  1. Date: 5/16/2013 8:05:00 AM
    - I completely agree with you in the last two lines Jack! - Likes your haiku poems as they are - Have a nice day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 5/16/2013 8:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I haven't been at this very long, but I'm finding myself waking with lines and titles in my head, similar to your experience. Actually, it's a good feeling. Retirement left a void that poetry seems to fill, at least in part.
  1. Date: 5/16/2013 6:37:00 AM
    Your haikus are always good. I also wanted to say thanks for your comment on my poem, 'In Long Quiet' Its one of those that i felt deeply as well...couldn't go to sleep one night thinking about it, got up and wrote it, and went right to sleep.

  1. Date: 5/16/2013 12:09:00 AM
    Very nice Jack! I liked the picture of a hungry caterpillar on a white flower. Though I admit I'm slightly confused about the word 'grief' in the poem. I see the haiku is leaning more towards the beauty of life because of the rain... not so much sorrow. But other than than I thoroughly enjoyed it. I liked your side note as well for I very much agree. The syllables seem like a petty argument when one could simply be writing for the haiku (for the sheer joy) of writing haiku.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 5/16/2013 8:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Timothy. "Grief" refers to white hydrangeas symbolizing grief in Japanese culture, or so wiki said. I may be wrong about this, but I believe that white represents death, as black does in the West. I hope my explanation and references help quell the haiku argument. Syllable count just isn't that important, by definition.
  1. Date: 5/15/2013 10:41:00 AM
    Well, I certainly enjoyed. Im usually completely confused about this form..switching back and forth from traditional to contemporary..but I agree, ENJOY is the best guide..BG

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 5/15/2013 12:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Indeed it is... Jack