Haiku 41

white ice golf balls dimpling the roof of my car Oklahoma Spring

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James Peranteau

Date: 4/26/2013 5:19:00 PM

In 1980 I was in, Grapevine Texas, And there was an hail storm, which, was-with-out-a-doubt, golf ball size ice balls ! Ouch...I was caught in the bombing ! Thanks fer the mem's ! Have a wonderful weekend dear poet....much love, james

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/24/2013 8:22:00 PM

Sounds similar to Idaho weather. There is a saying that goes on around here "If you don't like the weather, wait five minutes". A real kicker in the end - in haiku the goal is to surprise in the end, but at the same time make it feel as though it was inevitable. You did that, "to a tee"... sorry couldn't resist the golf reference, hehe ;)

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/24/2013 8:39:00 PM

Thanks, Timothy. Idaho, eh? My daughter, son-in-law and grand daughter live in Pullman, WA, but work at the university in Moscow. What part of Idaho are you from? Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/24/2013 2:57:00 PM

oh my, you are good!!! I think I like this one even better.

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/24/2013 3:17:00 PM

Wow! Thanks! I haven't had an insurance estimate done yet, but I imagine it's going to be a whopper... Jack

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/23/2013 10:55:00 AM

Sad..Hail falling down..Great work..Creative and unique..Sara

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/23/2013 10:57:00 AM

Oops!! Overlapping replies... Thanks for the comment... Jack

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/23/2013 10:55:00 AM

You too... Shelter in place, as they say, whatever happens to the car... Jack

Donna Jones

Date: 4/23/2013 10:20:00 AM

Yep....here we go again Jack.....stay safe...:-)

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/23/2013 10:56:00 AM

You too... Shelter in place, as they say, whatever happens to the car... Jack

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/23/2013 9:29:00 AM

Many golfers? - Well done Jack! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/23/2013 10:15:00 AM

No golfers, just crazy Oklahoma weather, including a massive hailstorm a week ago that caused millions in damage. Spring is always bad weather season here, what with tornadoes, hail storms, wind gusts, sand storms... Jack