Haiku

My first attempts at haiku Lost Youth she gazed on memories and reached to claim the shadows of lost youth Heat he struck a match her face emerged in the glow he felt the heat

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/22/2014 9:29:00 AM

Two great haiku really commendable. love)) rajat

Anne Rutherford

Date: 7/7/2012 7:16:00 AM

These are two of the best 'Haiku 'poems I've come across . For a first attempt you hit the nail on the head. They have deep meaning , read them twice and then stoped and thought about them.I would call them Senryu rather than Haiku but they are sure beautiful .Anne

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 6/21/2012 3:30:00 PM

BTW... LOVELY HAIKUS!!!

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 6/21/2012 3:29:00 PM

What I love about these pieces is their uninterrupted flow and grammatical correctness. That being said, the emotions... sadness at a love lost, and passion at a new love growing... are exceptional! Love, Keith :)

John Loving Iii

Date: 6/5/2012 2:19:00 PM

pretty good intent...

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/13/2012 1:33:00 PM

I quite enjoyed this Lizzie! I will probably never get around to grasp the whole drama surrounding haiku but I really enjoyed your attempt at it... Hope your weekend is a good one! Love Wilma

Chuck Novotny

Date: 4/2/2012 1:10:00 AM

I, too, just took my first shot at haiku. Heat is especially rich! Keep writing. - Chuck

Joann Grisetti

Date: 3/23/2012 9:11:00 AM

Very good for your first attempt. Definitely keep writing these.

Date: 1/4/2012 8:06:00 PM

It was good to read this one again. Thank you for your kind comment on my final post. I wish you the best with your writing and with life in general. Blessings to you. Karen

Date: 11/9/2011 8:39:00 PM

Nice use of imagery. Haiku is a very difficult form to master. Hope you keep at it as there are a lot of markets open for those who master this form. Best wishes. Karen

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 11/4/2011 8:36:00 AM

missed u , friend..thnx for your visit..surprised to learn that this is your first attempt at haiku..but they r awesome, especially the second one which should rank among some of the best i have seen for a while

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/4/2011 2:48:00 AM

excellent Elizabeth, the second one especially is awesome, love the titles also. harry

Jack Horne

Date: 11/2/2011 2:27:00 PM

Lovely haiku, Elizabeth - I'm just about getting the hang of them now. I hadn't realised how difficult they were until I tried writing them...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/1/2011 10:31:00 AM

I really like these..Very expressive and descriptive.Thanks for the kind review of my work.Yes winter will be upon us soon and has hit some states already...Soup mail..Sara

James Peranteau

Date: 10/31/2011 1:00:00 PM

Both writes are touching here dear poet, now that wasn't all that hard, wer rit ? *smiles* later lady ! Much love, james

Gwendolen Song

Date: 10/31/2011 3:45:00 AM

Your haiku are gorgeous and so different...must be because your write lyrics...I really like both of these. Very nice comments below from Charles. He is definately an valuable resource! ps..I can feel myself jumping into the first haiku and sharing the same emotions. Gwendolen

Charles Henderson

Date: 10/30/2011 5:08:00 PM

Your comment about some haiku looking so effortless yet carry such a message. Strange I just saw a very long paragraph dedicated to that premise last week. That is a mystery about haiku that one can not answer until they have wrestled with one over and over trying to get the wanted expression only to end up tossing it. No matter how long or how short it takes the successful haiku is just as you described. If a person doesn't look at it closely they might would think, what a waste of time.

Robert Johnson

Date: 10/30/2011 2:34:00 PM

She touched the face of yesterday to have it feel so cold. These are the lessons we learn in life if we're lucky to get old.

John Aaron Green

Date: 10/30/2011 10:34:00 AM

i am not writing them yet,,but i will tell you this is wonderful,,,with rich meaning....

M. Hussain Effendi

Date: 10/30/2011 7:07:00 AM

You plan on reigning on all forms of poetry, I am starting to feel jealous...lol Just kidding. Great Haiku, madame

Kash Poet

Date: 10/30/2011 5:18:00 AM

OOOPS I had already visited this page before.

Kash Poet

Date: 10/30/2011 5:16:00 AM

Good haiku elizabeth.I think I have already read these in FB.

Bl Devnath

Date: 10/29/2011 11:43:00 PM

For you, its nothing, just pieces of glittering star like words you have used to depict deep meaningful write about 'Lost Youth' and 'Heart'. Carry on awaiting a New bright sun at the dawn of 'Haiku'. My friend, never miss. Thanks for sharing and giving comments on my writes. bl

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 10/29/2011 5:02:00 PM

hmmm kind of feel the heat from here and then the imagination plays..... Cool Elizabeth

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/29/2011 12:09:00 PM

speaks volumes elizabeth in a few lines and words .. emotions are evident in this dynamic expression of reaching for the lost memories.. awesome Haiku luv..