Haiku 27

Sea and sigh whispers. As water rolls, the waves fall dark and velvety.

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/22/2013 10:04:00 AM

... dark and velvety... adored that last line! Makes me think of fresh coffee in the morning (wonder what that's like to swim in?)

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/22/2013 11:43:00 AM

Especially with cream. J

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2013 5:50:00 PM

always writing beautiful haiku , are you!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/21/2013 10:00:00 PM

Thanks, but not always beautiful. I've got one coming up that is far from it. I've become fascinated by the form, and just checked eight books on haiku out of the university library. The possible variations are amazing, including Jack Kerouac's and William S. Burroughs'.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/21/2013 2:26:00 PM

Very interesting Haiku..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Sara

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/21/2013 3:46:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by, Sara. Jack

Donna Jones

Date: 3/21/2013 11:09:00 AM

Beautiful Jack....

Donna Jones
Date: 3/22/2013 10:04:00 PM

Thanks...and all four siblings and i have weird yellowish green eyes but they change colors by mood like mood rings...

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/21/2013 1:28:00 PM

Thanks, Donna. Interesting new photo. The eyes have it... Jack