Haiku 25

This event in the garden: life sprouting from dimpled snow. Crocus, hyacinth.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2013 5:53:00 PM

a great imagery of rebirth.

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/21/2013 9:50:00 PM

Thanks. I didn't think of it that way at all; I'm too literal. I like your version better.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 3/20/2013 5:59:00 AM

now this is the sort of haiku I enjoy, it paints a vivid picture of the spring flowers breaking through the snow; technically correct or not it is effective, a lovely poem for spring :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/20/2013 8:24:00 AM

Thanks, Charlotte, for your comments on this, the first day of spring. Jack

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/19/2013 12:47:00 AM

Aww this was sweet... I feel for the flower as a survivor of the harsh winter :) I liked how this simply stated facts... not striving for cleverness but simply writing the world around you as it was happening... 'tis real haiku!

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/19/2013 9:00:00 AM

Thanks, Timothy. I thought a "bright" poem might be nice for a change.

Painted Hunter

Date: 3/18/2013 6:43:00 AM

dimpled snow.....love that, Jack

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/18/2013 8:21:00 AM

Thanks, Caleb.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/17/2013 2:47:00 PM

Under the snow in the frozen soil, grow Snowdrops in my garden. - Beautifully Haiku Jack! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/17/2013 4:31:00 PM

I thought it was time for something a bit less gloomy than my norm. BTW, I like your new Avatar. Jack