Haiku 18

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laughter fills the air as fireworks burst -- flower petal trails * see about the poem

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Kash Poet

Date: 11/13/2012 6:42:00 AM

NICE!!

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 11/12/2012 10:01:00 PM

I like it BUT ( I always feel like a shmuck for saying BUT) I wonder if there is a way to leave out the word flower... perhaps a type of flower... I am not certain if anything other than flowers have petals. :) Hey, hope you enter my contest. I can't wait to see all the different entries! Its midnight. Must get to bed! xox Dee

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 11/13/2012 6:45:00 AM

yes of course it would be fine to say the type of flower BUt since so many different types of flower petals are used...I let the reader decide..

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 11/12/2012 6:10:00 PM

I will pick 2 tomorrow and enter. Thank u !!! Hugs Michael

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 11/12/2012 3:52:00 PM

So nice to read you today. It's a perfect Haiku. Hugs Michael