Haiku

a donkey poops beneath the tree --- dragonflies 5/2/2018

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Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/5/2018 9:53:00 AM

Giggles, love it! Congratulations on your win! :)

Jack Webster
Date: 5/5/2018 10:42:00 PM

thank you Maureen!

Eve Roper

Date: 5/2/2018 9:09:00 PM

Great imagery, Jack, and stinky :) hehe... congratulations on your win.. Hugs Eve

Jack Webster
Date: 5/2/2018 10:59:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve!

Md Johnson

Date: 5/2/2018 7:11:00 PM

My son will love this one. I enjoyed it as well. Congratulations!

Jack Webster
Date: 5/2/2018 9:01:00 PM

thank you MD Johnson

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/2/2018 5:34:00 PM

haha, yours is GREAT!!

Jack Webster
Date: 5/2/2018 6:30:00 PM

Thank you Andrea! I'm just glad i formatted it correctly. i was so nervous. Decided to have fun with it.

Mick Talbot

Date: 5/2/2018 5:10:00 PM

I wonder how many people were expecting dungflies, you confounded me, making you a winner, congratulations Jack. Mick

Jack Webster
Date: 5/2/2018 6:29:00 PM

Thank you, Mick. I'm so pleased. I really struggle with haiku, even when it's 575. I tend to overthink my haiku to death. 353 really forced me to let go of trying to make it about something. I was in the john at Walgreens when i saw the contest, and i know most authentic haiku comes from observing nature, so i tried to transpose my authentic experience into something an ancient haiku poet might observe in nature. it seemed so crude, though, so stuck the dragonflies in at the end to conclude with a pleasant image. As is, i guess i kind of see it as a statement that ugliness and beauty don't always exist in isolation from each other. Thank you so much for generously including me amongst the other wonderful entries.