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Haiku - Oceans Apart

misty horizon oceans separate his lips from drops on her cheeks Or oceans part his lips from wet drops marking her cheeks misty horizon

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Date: 3/14/2017 10:21:00 PM
Absolutely love this. Both versions are beautiful. A well deserved 7
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Date: 3/8/2017 2:49:00 PM
Both are beautiful!! :) if you're asking for input: here's an idea to consider... 'from drops on her cheeks oceans part his longing lips misty horizon' Well done my friend. Love your theme!:) Big Hugggs and love! deb
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Date: 3/8/2017 1:40:00 PM
Hello Charmaine. Both are marvelously executed and expressed. However if you are asking the reader I like your first as it has more of an impact and expression. This is just my small opinion of course. The work belongs to you and you alone. Both versions are lovely. Well done
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Date: 3/8/2017 7:54:00 AM
I like the original much better : )
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Date: 3/8/2017 12:26:00 AM
What a wonderful haiku, you write great ones! Next tim I write on I come to you for advice :)
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Date: 3/7/2017 8:16:00 PM
Beautiful Haikuxomo 7!
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Date: 3/7/2017 5:19:00 PM
you are amazing, dear. There is only one writer like CHARMA!
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Date: 3/7/2017 5:02:00 PM
Such a sad but beautiful poem Charmaine. You have expressed these emotions so well and in so few words.
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Date: 3/7/2017 4:22:00 PM
aww sadly beautiful Charma:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/7/2017 3:54:00 PM
Very sweet but with filled with sadness. Such great imagery Charma...A fav
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