Haibun

New Zealand's favourite bird is the Tui, also called parson bird for its ruffled white cravat - it is famously noted for various lyrical songs - consisting of soul tuning notes - intricate melodies or single beats when bereaved of its mate for life, cheeky flaunting flights near heads in joyful play, even the wingbeats are spirit music - now when gardening i'm subjected to screeches of rubbish trucks - ' eat your silverbeet ' song and this seasons main choice - the electronic car door opener i mourn the sounds that used to clear my heart - all gardening day long electronic beeps bright tui song in mothballs natures pure revenge Written 20 June 2018 nb tui = 2 syllables

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/17/2018 7:54:00 AM

Congrats on your win. Way to go. Sara

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/18/2018 1:10:00 AM

thank you so much

Charles Messina

Date: 7/6/2018 10:20:00 PM

You have taught me some history of New Zealand, and I love it. Excellent write, Virginia...Congratulations on your win! Charlie

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/7/2018 1:26:00 AM

Cool and thank you

Eve Roper

Date: 7/6/2018 9:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Virginia! Hugs Eve

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/7/2018 1:26:00 AM

thank you Eve

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/6/2018 3:22:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Informative and realistic haibun. Well done!

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/18/2018 1:06:00 AM

thanks Susan, took a while to find the right subject

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/6/2018 4:13:00 PM

thanks Susan - these tui beeps are a constant all day long , first thing I hear on waking - reality has changed in nature. Unfortunately they don't like my singing enough to mimic -

Mick Talbot

Date: 7/6/2018 5:21:00 AM

A superb prose, and if was not for it I'd taken the kigo in the haiku as a reference to autumn. as is, congratulations on a first place win Virginia, plus many thanks for your participation, Mick

Virginia Waters
Date: 7/6/2018 4:11:00 PM

thanks - didn't know I'd used a kigo. Its winter here in nz, btw.