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She searched beneath flashing green neon signs advertising cheap rooms for rent - ten by the hour. She prowled - her vision sharpest in the night Celadon eyes of a feral cat, out searching for her Tom. Sufficient suspicions surfaced in a splenetic jaded mind fed with juicy scraps and morsels of hearsay. Jealousy grew in truculent shades of green, to a height taller than a forest of giant spruce and pine. Trust be damned, an evil spell cast upon her heart. Neon blinks painted emerald stripes across her distorted face. Possessed, she ripped her dress and screamed his name. Pounded on doors painted in deep verdant hue all closed to the night's vulgar rantings. Flashing lights, blue and red, a door finally opened. Tears fell from green crystalized eyes black mascara streaked down each cheek a beast-like mask of caustic emotions. Caged - the 'Green Eyed Monster' - locked away =____________________________________= March 1st, 2016 Green Contest: Silent One

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Date: 1/8/2020 1:16:00 PM
Lots of vivid imagery in this one. Should it be "hearsay" in line six?
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/8/2020 1:26:00 PM
It should, and now it does. Thank you for the edit, Michael. This editor needs to more closely edit herself. I appreciate the browsing you've done to find this one.
Date: 3/3/2016 7:57:00 AM
congrats watch out for toms good win
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Date: 3/3/2016 8:04:00 AM
lol I think Tom had better behave himself. Thanks, Stephen.
Date: 3/3/2016 5:43:00 AM
Great story telling on the color green, Lin. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/3/2016 5:52:00 AM
Thanks so much, Elaine.
Date: 3/2/2016 7:19:00 PM
Lin, congratulations on your win in the contest.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 8:15:00 PM
Thanks. Eve ;)
Date: 3/2/2016 5:53:00 PM
Congratulations, Peaches, on another magnificent write. I'm really getting behind aren't I. You write so many I can't keep up. You're really giving me a complex!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 3/2/2016 6:26:00 PM
I'll try harder. XOXOXO
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 6:18:00 PM
Thank you, Danny, but we're not keeping score. Maybe I'm spending too much time writing.
Date: 3/2/2016 5:38:00 PM
Hi Lin, i thoroughly enjoyed the read. A seven from me. Congratulations on your win in the contest.
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 5:51:00 PM
Thank you, Vlad.
Date: 3/2/2016 5:12:00 PM
Lin, congratulations on your win in the 'Green' contest! Great poem. Hugs, Sandra
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 5:37:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 3/2/2016 3:18:00 PM
Lin, congrats on your placement in the green contest! "Green Eyed Monster" -love this. Be blessed -luloo :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/2/2016 4:37:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 3/1/2016 11:16:00 AM
"Caustic Emotion" Great write, Good luck
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/1/2016 11:37:00 AM
Thanks so much, Charlie.
Date: 3/1/2016 10:20:00 AM
"Sufficient suspicions...." are exactly what gives birth to the "green eyed monster"...a visually powerful piece! There is a lesson here!
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Lin Lane
Date: 3/1/2016 11:36:00 AM
Thank you for liking this one so well, Walter. ;)

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