Green

I saw her on first day of spring She walked across the village green She lightly trod on verdant grass In matching dress – a beauty queen! She stole my heart; I looked in awe, The playful wind ruffled her hair And then she stopped beneath a tree I could hear music in the air. Then he arrived and fast approached Her eyes lit up – my beauty queen; As they embraced and fondly kissed Engulfed with envy I turned green! ------------------------------------------ For Carolyn Devonshire's "Green" contest Placed 3rd

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/25/2019 5:20:00 AM

What a treat Paul, with an unexpected ending! Loved it! Congratulations on your win! : )

Jan Allison

Date: 3/24/2019 7:42:00 PM

so lovely to read this gem again Paul, Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2019 9:37:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. Have been off air for a couple of days...my computer is playing me up again; perhaps time to get a new on, though I think it as to wait...Hugs // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/24/2019 9:08:00 AM

Hi Paul, I enjoyed how it started off so lovely and romantic and then Bam, that "green" eyed monster had to ruin it all. Congratulations on a well deserved win:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2019 11:52:00 AM

That is what happens when people daydream, Alexis...they're in for a surprise!:) Your comments and congrats are appreciated. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/24/2019 7:29:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win in the "Green" Humor Contest, Paul :) - greeting from // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2019 11:50:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. I'm changing over to "green tea" :) Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/24/2019 7:17:00 AM

Hi Paul, Don't know how I missed this poem but so happy I saw your win in Carolyn's contest. Warm wishes and hugs Jennifer

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2019 11:35:00 AM

Thank you, Jenny. I bet I miss more poems than you do:) Warm wishes and hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/23/2019 8:28:00 PM

The irony that the pretty lady was dressed up to meet another man was well conveyed, Paul. Had to pity the man who was hoping she'd come to him. Congratulations on your win! There were many great entries, so you should be proud of your achievement. Best wishes, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/24/2019 4:49:00 AM

Thank you for my placement, Carolyn. Glad you enjoyed my entry, though I wish it had contained a bigger dose of humour! Hugs // paul

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 4/13/2015 4:41:00 PM

This is so cute and clever Paul. Excellent write. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 4/29/2015 3:31:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Cecilia. // I'm not back on Soup, yet, but getting there, slowly:) Hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/1/2015 12:02:00 PM

Another amazing write my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/1/2015 12:07:00 PM

Thank you Armand; your support is appreciated. // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 3/28/2015 7:30:00 AM

love the sad surprise ending - lovely write, my friend. Hope you are well and having a great weekend : )

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 11:38:00 AM

Thank you for both comments and wishes, Jack. I'm being kept very busy at the moment and am finding little time for writing. Hope you are coping well, my friend. A lovely weekend to you, too. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/26/2015 9:05:00 PM

Perfect, you truly entertained with this clever write! Bravo!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/27/2015 4:06:00 PM

"Entertained" is the correct word, Richard! That was the scope behind this light poem. All the best. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/26/2015 4:42:00 AM

hahhaah I love this one Dearie Paul how you manage to combine the nature as so green then end up with that feeling of green! two in one for the contest!!! like it!!! I read few entries to that contest, 2 are so memorable to me and this one of them.. :)! Thanks so much Paul.. No worries all can wait.. My prayers always for you.. hugs and smiles!! treat: oh forget after Lent still! :D :P //.olive eloisa

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:52:00 PM

I did my best to please, Olive_eloi:) I too have read several good entries, and I am sure that the judge will not find it easy to do her work! Thank you for the prayers...much appreciated...so are they hugs and smiles. I'm saving you all the treats:) Hugs // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 3/25/2015 11:51:00 PM

Wow, this is a very creative and brilliant write my very dear friend, Paul. I thoroughly enjoyed. Good luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing! More blessings to you! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:55:00 PM

Pleased that you found it to your liking, Leonora! Hope you are enjoying the school holidays:) Thank you for stopping by. Hugs // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/25/2015 9:10:00 PM

Very cute, Paul...I was waiting for some jealousy to enter this contest! A wonderful write, and I enjoyed reading it tonight...hugs, Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:36:00 PM

Hi Rhonda! Yes, quite a bit of jealousy has crept into several of the entries; let's see how it's going to affect our judge!! Thank you for reading and enjoying! Hugs // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/25/2015 12:38:00 PM

Very creative way to go with this contest..I like the personification..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:22:00 PM

As always, a very welcome visit yours, Sara. Thank you. take care. // paul

Constance La France

Date: 3/25/2015 9:52:00 AM

Paul, this poem is delightful and full of green, best of luck in the contest, it is a perfect winning 7 for me, and thanks for visiting my poem, in the chilly morn . . .

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:34:00 PM

Hi Constance! So lovely to have you popping in with 'delightful' comments and a high rating! A dose of luck is always needed:) All the best. // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/25/2015 9:35:00 AM

Love this well written piece my friend. Closing stanza got me as that once happened to me as a young man. A girl I loved from afar but was too scared to even speak to, such was her beauty. A7 andpm on the way..

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:29:00 PM

I can relate to a similar experience such as yours, Robert; in my case there was no envy, just an aching heart. Thank you for stopping by and sharing words! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 3/25/2015 4:50:00 AM

Excellent pen Paul ! I truly enjoyed reading your piece, my dear friend. Sweet and cute it made me smile. A 7! GL in the contest! Wishing you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless you! :-) D.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:31:00 PM

Glad you found this poem to your liking, Dorian...and that it put a smile on your face:) Thank you. // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 3/25/2015 3:44:00 AM

Nicely imagined! All the best for the contest, Paul... Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 4:59:00 PM

Thank you, Julia. Yes, imagined it is; as to envy, I am happy to say that we never saw eye to eye! hugs // paul

Edward Ebbs

Date: 3/24/2015 9:43:00 PM

Envy for just a moment and then you smiled, right? Thanks for your poem, good luck in the contest :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:15:00 PM

Hi Ed! Envy must never dwell within us; it's no good! Better to smile and move on....Thanks for stopping by. // paul

David Meade

Date: 3/24/2015 9:05:00 PM

Well, I say forget her, check out the one in pink!! Nicely done dear friend -- 7+

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 5:01:00 PM

Yours is wise advice, David....but people such as us have the benefit of experience:) Thank you for the high rating, my friend. All the best. // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/24/2015 8:38:00 PM

wonderful! you've covered every aspect of green very smoothly in this excellent poem...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 4:52:00 PM

I did my best, Ilene! But I see that I'm not the only one to be so inspired:) Thanks for stopping by. // paul

Kim Shaw

Date: 3/24/2015 7:41:00 PM

Lovely story of 'green with envy', Paul. I really enjoyed this. Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Kimberly

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 4:51:00 PM

Thank you Kimberly. I have noticed that quite a few entries are dealing with green and envy! Makes it harder for the sponsor to judge! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/24/2015 7:38:00 PM

a wonderful entry for the contest Paul :-) Good luck:-) Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 4:28:00 PM

Thank you Jan; I have seen several good entries; good luck to all:) hugs // paul