Grand

Cheer comes to me To help me see Be still my heart Love frames fine start See how joy thrills Then moves deep feel Grand poise funds taste In subtle haste I journey far To reach the stars Leon Enriquez 25 October 2016 Singapore

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Keith Logan

Date: 10/26/2016 6:56:00 AM

Good as far as it goes but you have made no effort to rhyme the third couplet. An example of an easy near-rhyme would be: See how joys keep Those feelings deep.

Leon Enriquez
Date: 10/27/2016 1:04:00 PM

Dear Keith: Thank you for your comments and suggestions. Leon

Keith Logan
Date: 10/26/2016 7:05:00 AM

or, see how joys reap those feelings deep. or if you don't like inversion, Taste of that thrill, that joy must fill.