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Goodbye Forever

Slowly so sneakily you crept into my life Destroying everything in your path You simply don’t care do you? Leaving your slime everywhere Eradicating everything you touch Moving on to your next innocent victim You revolt me and I detest the sight of you I heaved when I saw you today Well I’ve got news for you I know your little game and ITS OVER I’ve put the pellets down and you are trapped Goodbye slug forever Jan Allison 4th September 2014

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Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 9/25/2014 5:23:00 PM

Poor little slugs, Jan! Can't help it feel sorry for them when they get killed. I know the are very destructive to plants and garden and so yucky looking, slimmy and all that. But still think they do what's in their nature looking for their meal supply to live and survive. Sometimes I don't even know what to do with them when I see them in some of my plants. *sighs* have to do what I have to do I guess, you get my point. Great write Jan! Hugs! xxxx D.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/25/2014 5:25:00 PM

There's no poor little slugs Dorian LOL they aren't getting anywhere near my melons! Hugs jan xx

Thomas Mansfield

Date: 9/6/2014 12:25:00 PM

The slimy Slug and snail Slither through each fence and rail And we growl to no avail As they munch our veg and kale But at least they get the nail With pellets mixed in a pail And whether sun or rain or hail We are rid of slime and trail.... Thanks for the laugh Jan... :)

Thomas Mansfield
Date: 9/6/2014 1:56:00 PM

Of course not Jan.. As if any unwanted guest should get anywhere near your melons, let alone get their gnashers into them.... :D Have a LOVELY evening xx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 1:51:00 PM

They are not getting their gnashers into my Melons! Lovely to meet you Thomas will drop by your page:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/5/2014 9:27:00 AM

Nicely penned ..I like the surprise ending...hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 9:39:00 AM

Thanks Joseph for the lovely comment:- Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/5/2014 6:31:00 AM

Sometimes it is best just to walk away..This is very descriptive work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 8:34:00 AM

OH no Sara this slug wasn't getting its teeth into my melons LOL:-) Hugs jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/4/2014 11:49:00 PM

This is just awesome - love it. Love and prayers for you, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2014 3:40:00 AM

Thanks Regina so glad you enjoyed it:-) many hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/4/2014 7:16:00 PM

You scared me again then managed to do it again. You crack me up so much.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 7:18:00 PM

Am so pleased I brighten your day Brenda I try and write with as much humour as possible to brighten my world too and the best bit... my melons are safe LOL :-) Hugs jan xxx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/4/2014 6:39:00 PM

i don't have a garden so i can't relate (i don't really mind seeing the occasional slug on a wet road) but i thoroughly enjoyed your poem about them. i hope your pellets work!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 6:47:00 PM

Oh believe me Eileen the slug has gone to the little slug heaven in the sky and my melons are safe LOL :-) RIP slug :-( Hugs Jan xxx

John Lawless

Date: 9/4/2014 5:48:00 PM

They are a dastardly group of detestably devious slow eaters.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 6:14:00 PM

LOl got mine covered:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/4/2014 5:55:00 PM

hahahaha

John Lawless
Date: 9/4/2014 5:53:00 PM

At all cost "PROTECT THE MELONS"

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 5:50:00 PM

Love the allieteration of your comment John:-) they aren't slow when they get their choppers into my veg and they aren't getting hold of my melons LOL. Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/4/2014 5:18:00 PM

Jan I should tell you. Five years ago I took my mother to hospital. Although my Dad was around they needed my help. My mother came out a year later. She has bed ridden since. I found myself caring for my parents until two years ago when I lost my father. Now I care for my mother. It has been difficult for me but rewarding. This is a great distraction for me.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 5:30:00 PM

Maurice my heart goes out to you thank you for sharing - illness and aging parents - it is so so difficult isn't it - i guess we all have a story how we came to be here and you know mine. Writing poetry is a great distraction and cathartic and it has changed my life forever for the better with some amazing friendships forged and a confidence i never had before:-) Hugs Jan xxx Keep smiling Maurice I try to :-) :-)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/4/2014 4:46:00 PM

i think the part that hurts me the most is that you refer to me as a slug and i am not even the one who brought up your melons. oh tim what a wicked web you weave once you enter jan's garden. all that aside, i loved this so called "personification". well written, constructed formed and expressed. a great read, very pleasing.

Tim Smith
Date: 9/4/2014 8:56:00 PM

Was my comment naughty :)...lol

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 5:13:00 PM

You always make me smile Mauirice thank you:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/4/2014 5:11:00 PM

I love you both. I love having fun with both of you.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 4:50:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely witty comment Maurice. Tim is a wonderful friend and my naughtiness is rubbing off onto him and his romantic writes onto me so best of both worlds:-) hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/4/2014 3:45:00 PM

Hate anything besides my plants growing in my garden....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 4:11:00 PM

LOL they need to be bigger Tim few weeks yet before they are ripe and ready to be picked:-)

Tim Smith
Date: 9/4/2014 3:59:00 PM

I bet small round succulent and sweet :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 3:55:00 PM

LOL they are only tiny :-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 9/4/2014 3:53:00 PM

Don't touch those melons :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2014 3:49:00 PM

It WAS in my greenhouse by my cucumbers and melon..... it is no more! Hugs Jan xxx