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Goodbye

The smile you wear with sweet embrace, so warm, it melts my weary heart. Your laughter lines your lovely face, a gently sculpted work of art. With joy of you my days are bright like morning mist you've touched my soul, but now I must accept my plight and loose my dream, accept my toll. Oh how I wish that you would stay but you alone must make your choice, and longingly I'll miss that day when last I hear your caring voice. For now you're here, you haven't flown, and yet I feel so all alone.
11/19/16

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Date: 4/14/2017 8:15:00 AM
A SAD SONNET AND VERY CREATIVELY WRITTEN TOO. Superb work my friend. I love to read great sonnets and this one qualifies in spades. A7
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James Inman
Date: 4/14/2017 11:04:00 AM
Thank you Robert.
Date: 2/15/2017 6:10:00 AM
I can relate :( .... how sad the message of the poem yet so beautifully penned... :) i love the couplet :)
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James Inman
Date: 2/15/2017 7:30:00 AM
Thank you Stephany. This is a difficult situation. Sorry if you've been there. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 11/26/2016 7:19:00 PM
James, so so good emotions stir in this beautiful piece, congratulations on your win. Thank you so very much for participating in my Sonnet contest Hugs Eve
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James Inman
Date: 11/27/2016 7:58:00 AM
Thank you Eve. A wonderful contest you have sponsored. Thank you for taking your time to host it.
Date: 11/24/2016 10:33:00 AM
Excuse me, pardon - I just forgot the number 7+++++++++
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Date: 11/24/2016 10:32:00 AM
From me, this gets a WOW. You choose 8 syll lines and the iambic (correct for 8 syll?) pentameter is perfect, the sentiment is moving and I, as reader, have been touched by a beautifully emotional sonnet. Again, and always sincere - WOW ... CayCay
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James Inman
Date: 11/24/2016 9:16:00 PM
Thank you CayCay. It is Iambic Tetrameter, if I spelled that correctly. Thought I'd try something different. Thank you again.
Date: 11/23/2016 10:21:00 AM
A pleasure indeed to have a comment from you as I too share that same emotion from reading this particular piece until the last two lines. Marriages and relationships are hard work!!!! You seem to express what majority of people go through in this write. Love it!!!
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James Inman
Date: 11/23/2016 10:38:00 AM
Thank you for the kind comment.
Date: 11/19/2016 9:51:00 PM
Suchearnestness and longing conveyed splendidly in your excellent sonnet, James! Enjoyed this, 7. :)
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James Inman
Date: 11/21/2016 7:26:00 AM
Thanks for the kind words Laura.
Date: 11/19/2016 11:40:00 AM
What an amazing write full of love and longing. I love the sonnet form. You have used it beautifully to convey your heart.
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James Inman
Date: 11/19/2016 12:12:00 PM
Thanks Eileen. It's nice to get such a lovely comment from a master of emotion.
Date: 11/19/2016 10:36:00 AM
I have a heavy heart reading this sad poem. You expressed the sorrow of saying goodbye extremely well in this piece. Great write!
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James Inman
Date: 11/19/2016 11:54:00 AM
Thank you for the nice comment Carol.

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