Gone

words can feel then find somewhere in the mind a bang and bolt a jolt then a squeeze with an ease like a gentle breeze and then still even so with a will to know an insatiable flow when the thaw lets it go to wherever the past is gone

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Robert Lindley

Date: 1/19/2015 11:43:00 PM

A very inspirational write my friend. Deep enough to have to read more than once. A solid 7 I give this poem.. Bravo!!!!! Looking forward to reading more of your work!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/15/2015 10:57:00 PM

a million , you are welcome :) ((regarding the bottom reply))

Eve Roper

Date: 1/12/2015 11:26:00 PM

Congratulations, James,featured on Poetry Soup's Home Page,good write 7

James Ranahan
Date: 1/13/2015 12:24:00 AM

Thank you for noticing. It's nice to meet you. Jim

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/10/2015 10:48:00 PM

James, Congratulations on having your poem featured on Poetry Soup's Home Page. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

James Ranahan
Date: 1/12/2015 8:35:00 PM

Linda: A thousand thanks. Jim

Ralph Sergi

Date: 1/7/2015 6:43:00 PM

Hi James, nice to know you. your poem, although short fills up a space with a rhythmic pace. My compliments!

James Ranahan
Date: 1/8/2015 12:44:00 AM

Hi Scott, Thank you for your compliments. I could live in that space with a rhythmic pace.

Michael Salazar

Date: 1/7/2015 1:46:00 PM

I love this. Such deep feeling within. A feeling of warmth an of hope. S o very descriptive.

James Ranahan
Date: 1/7/2015 4:47:00 PM

appreciate your kind words which are now a feeling of warmth and hope in me. thank you

Debbie Duncan

Date: 1/7/2015 2:47:00 AM

very nicely done,,, welcome to poetrysoup, happy new year ;)

James Ranahan
Date: 1/7/2015 4:48:00 PM

Happy New Year, thank you and thank you again.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 1/7/2015 1:09:00 AM

:) there is one great scripture in Philippians that tells us that whatever is in the past we must forgot and that we must look forward with Christ is our live.. :) this a short verse but the words are particularly so thoughtful.. :) i especially like the line with the word thaw.. I have similar poem with this title: GONE.. :) Welcome to PS.. I have been awhile here, I hope as you go along you will have fun like me.. :) Happy NEw Year! Blessings, olive eloisa.. :)

James Ranahan
Date: 1/7/2015 4:58:00 PM

i have seen how much work you have achieved. Now I look forward to reading your thoughts to be moved and to have fun.

J Eliza James

Date: 1/6/2015 8:49:00 PM

Hello James, Your poem inspired me to 'login'. Haven't done so for a good while; life gets in the way sometimes! Love your way with words in, Gone and how the rhythm changes towards the end. The final word is a bit like a brake though, as if it doesn't want to let go, so maybe if you could try... "to wherever the past is released", and let it float away. I will linger longer and read some more, Thanks for the hook. James, Wordancer

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:25:00 PM

Thank you for the feedback. I'm new to this so I appreciate your taking the time to read this offering. I like your idea of letting the past float away. Cool. Thanks again.

Yoni Abai

Date: 1/6/2015 3:50:00 PM

Really inspiring ! Looking forward to reading more. You can also check out some of mine and share your thoughts :)

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:30:00 PM

Thanks for your comment. I will check out your poetry and gladly share my thoughts. Jim

Kathy Larivee

Date: 1/6/2015 2:20:00 PM

Very nice:) Very pretty words. I like it!! Perhaps you'll check out mine

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:33:00 PM

Kathy: thank you. I'm glad you like the words. Look forward to reading what you have thought about. Jim

Simon Gorfam

Date: 1/6/2015 11:08:00 AM

Excellent. Perhaps remove "the"? Just puts a slight stop in the rhythm for me, and rhythm is the delight instinct within your words.

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:35:00 PM

Simon: the "the" can go, thanks for your comments. Jim

Bl Devnath

Date: 1/6/2015 10:29:00 AM

Beautiful poem of beautiful thought. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/6/2015 9:57:00 AM

Excellent! A Fav for me James. I will also add you to my fav poet list.

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:39:00 PM

Maurice: You are kind to share, and thank you.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/30/2014 7:20:00 PM

WOW, James, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy being part of the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, "In The Moment" in hopes it inspires you to write again. I look forward in following you and your poetry:) Enjoy this site, and the coming New Year! From: your new poet friend@-> LINDA <-@

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:48:00 PM

Thank you, it's nice to be here. I look forward to the new year and all it may hold; moment by moment.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/29/2014 1:21:00 PM

- A warm welcome to the P- Soup, James - The year 2014 is almost over ... and I look forward to reading new poems from you in the new year 2015 - Happy New Year! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 9:58:00 PM

Anne Lise: Thanks for your welcome...Happy New Year to you as well. I look forward to writing new poems in this new year, and reading what you have to say. Jim

Meg Anderson

Date: 12/29/2014 6:14:00 AM

I love the insight in this write. Its so true!

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 10:01:00 PM

Meg: Thank you for your comments. You made me smile. Its true! Jim

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 12/29/2014 12:21:00 AM

Very nice pen James! I really enjoyed your piece! A 7 from me! I wish you a very Happy New Year! I pray that 2015 brings just the best to you! Have a very lovely day! :) Love and hugs! xxx D."

James Ranahan
Date: 1/6/2015 10:02:00 PM

Dorian: thank you, and I am wishing you the very same. Jim