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Ghostly Dad

GHOSTLY DAD new year’s eve a ghostly frost coats his chair front porch so still car horns downtown turn back the clock new year’s eve no moon no starry night no dad to share in a sudden breeze a leaf floats down from somewhere early new year’s eve the last trolley car dings by that long yellow row if he’s aboard he doesn’t get off new year’s eve late cold coming in clear as a bell he points the big dipper on new year’s eve dad and brother made ice cream mom put on her new coat i got one too the vanilla stain still there Dave Austin

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Date: 1/10/2015 7:46:00 AM
I think it is all a matter of perspective. This work is interesting. In most stanzas I feel you alone observing with a twilight zone type of emptiness around you, but the last stanza is bright and cheery until the vanilla stain circles us back to the first stanza. This is a never ending tanka. Even in its melancholy air again it is that sense of family and the bright light shone on most of the last stanza.
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Date: 1/6/2015 8:42:00 AM
Wow! Melancholy memories. "The last trolley car" is such a poignant image.
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Date: 1/4/2015 1:38:00 PM
Soup mail ..'
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Date: 1/4/2015 10:40:00 AM
Ahh!! Enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for stopping by..Long ago vanilla ice cream stain that made a fine work..Sara
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Date: 1/3/2015 8:17:00 PM
Jan said it well, hauntingly sad, Daver. And the memories must be painful even after all this time. I enjoyed seeing this set.
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Date: 1/2/2015 9:52:00 PM
I would guess some of this is based on facts Daver.? I tried the 'mirror exercises' as you directed, but was such a task, owing to the mask.) so that only means removal of 'irritant' as a final means to the end, at this point I think it best to ascertain your address..' I was just reading from my acme book of government advice on how best to handle such an occasion L O L)) oh ps I enjoyed the above I'd better let you know now, as it will be impossible after my visit..'
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Date: 1/2/2015 7:12:00 PM
beautiful imagery but so hauntingly sad Daver :-( hugs jan xxx
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Date: 1/2/2015 6:48:00 PM
You've been writing some great stuff lately..I just love this melancholy little piece. wonderful work. BG
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