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Ghost of Cain

Replace this heart of soiled sedition. This junkyard filled with ugly treason. Forgive, o Lord, embattled reason, at the turnpike, chosen left ...off course. His smoke went up with no remorse, where my jealous hate, my brother slain, branded brow the mark of Cain. Now thoughts are choked by desert sand, I beg reprieve with blistered hands. Stolen youth in a game of chance, Just took off, no backward glance. Blinded by the blaring sun, aided by the caravans, endless miles through wispy sands My zest for water I forgot to think, At night a mare that steals my drink. Dancing girls in searing heat, with hooded eyes and flaming feet, a swimming haze, in a river there towards I run -they disappear. With Abel gone the ghost of Cain, tries to talk but can not say, Who howls at night and barks all day? Blood of my brother, source of my pain Your soul still wanders on a deserted plain

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Date: 9/5/2017 6:05:00 AM
It looks like you live in Eden, so beautiful! I decided to go back to the beginnings here and was greatly rewarded. A deep thought well expressed. Thank you for this poem.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/4/2018 2:49:00 PM
Quite so , and here I am finding your comments almost too late. I graciously thank you
Date: 1/10/2017 5:05:00 AM
Very profound, and deeply moving poem, Jannie. You have an exceptional ability to make your penned imagery come alive w/earnest emotion. Rare talent indeed. Love this poem, love the message even more. Magnificent write, my new poetic friend. Just a curious question, how exactly did Cain kill Abel? Very few souls know, except the Spirit reveals the mystery of the first murder recorded in human history. Much love and more love to you and yours from Romantic Warrior.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/10/2017 8:16:00 AM
I am sitting here smiling. The eye that sees and the ear that hears is a gift from God. Your humility Freddie makes you a beautiful person. This one and Punctated in Time are my favorites . Ty so much. My esteemed friend
Date: 10/27/2016 10:20:00 AM
You are receiving my fav response - WOW. The intelligent content one must commit to for it isn't quick reader fluff stuff, but deep and meaningful, then the rhyme and flow sparked my poetry pulse as only such poignant, well-written, deep, brief lines can do with their 1, 2 punch. AND, I personally love punctuation - it helped the flow and added clarity for me. Sometimes our best poems are delivered straight from muse to page w/o much revision and this reads like one such gem ... CayCay
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 10/27/2016 2:17:00 PM
Oh, Jannie - feel good compliments just keep coming - you are very kind to me! I wish my Father could read your remark below because I never went to college, only finished high school, then a year of secretarial training. SO - thank you!!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/27/2016 1:28:00 PM
My esteemed friend thank you. I absorb what you say . However, this poem took hours of labour. For me it doesnt just flow. You were better educated.
Date: 9/16/2016 4:32:00 PM
Superb, but if you'll make it political; I.e.; Include all thoes who kill their brothers, change the last line to: "We souls who wander desert plains."
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Robert Warlov
Date: 10/6/2016 2:32:00 AM
OK. I missed that. thanks for clarification, although much sibling rivalry is political.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/3/2016 4:23:00 AM
Hi Robert thamks for your input. I did change it but not the way you suggested.its all about infanticide or rather sibling rivalry not political
Date: 5/5/2016 8:53:00 AM
This is a great poem. Deep, smooth and with an important message. Closed out with very strong verses too.A7
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 5/11/2016 2:47:00 AM
wow thank you Robert
Date: 4/16/2016 7:14:00 PM
wow, this is deep! Love the allusions to the Bible story. Great writing, Janine.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 5/5/2016 4:45:00 AM
Thank you Andrea, I am very honoured and I see you are ranked no 1.congrats

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