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Getting the Point

Getting the Point A stitch a stitch to silence the witch A sharp sharp needle to make her twitch Two eyes of coal with grey grey hair Eyeballs gone and still she stares Earless rabbit She pulled them off His mouth sewed shut So he can’t cough Riddle me riddle me Why skin so pale inside my brain She pokes a nail She’s as real as real can be a creature crawling inside of me Poke the poker Jab me in the eye Stitch my lips closed so that I can’t cry. October is around the corner. I thought I would create a Halloween state of mind.

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Bill Baker

Date: 9/28/2023 2:45:00 PM

Well, you certainly stirred the pot, my friend. Good start for the Halloween season. It had a hocus pocus feel to it. Write On! Bill

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2023 6:41:00 AM

Thanks Bill, your visits are appreciated.

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/26/2023 6:47:00 AM

Gosh this is quite scary and if it was a horror movie I would be hiding behind a cushion Richard! I too, am thinking there’s more to this than meets the eye (although technically she’s got no eyeballs and that poor little rabbit!) ‘a creature crawling inside me’ Yuck! Great write.Keep them coming :) :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2023 11:57:00 AM

Thanks Christina.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/25/2023 7:52:00 AM

a bit scary but appropriate given Halloween is so close. I suppose we all have metaphorical 'witchy' creatures crawling inside of us. They're annoying. You're poem, however, wasn't :-) I enjoyed the read. Have a pleasant day

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/25/2023 12:01:00 PM

You as well Sara. You might like the one I just posted. ;0)

Tom Woody

Date: 9/25/2023 7:29:00 AM

I don't celebrate Halloween but this poem sure has its scary side, though stanza five makes me think there's more going on here than what's on the surface

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/25/2023 7:35:00 AM

Thanks for reading and commenting. I wrote the piece from a picture prompt.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 9/24/2023 12:22:00 PM

lol so you did Richard, shivery moments here, :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/25/2023 7:12:00 AM

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/24/2023 11:33:00 AM

love it Richard hugs Shadow

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/25/2023 7:12:00 AM

So nice to have you visit. Hugs Rick.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/23/2023 9:06:00 PM

Great job: Mission accomplished, Richard --- and so much more! This is a real mind-bender, if you ask me. Bravo, gw

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/24/2023 6:05:00 AM

Thanks Gershwin.

Susan Lawrence

Date: 9/23/2023 8:50:00 AM

Richard, So Creepy !! Aagh !! Graphic details building up until the final punch at the end.Great Halloween entry !! Hugs, Susan :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/23/2023 2:03:00 PM

Thanks and hugs back.;0)

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/23/2023 7:34:00 AM

WoW! Richard, This is so well written write for. " Halloween". I was not expecting that last line. Like always great job. Have a great weekend:-) Alexis

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/23/2023 2:04:00 PM

Much appreciated Alexis.