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Fusion

In the sizzling heat She wears new a furry mink The sly little fox Now its brimming cold He dared bare himself of skin The wily serpent And what racket here The cricket makes through the night The bats cannot hear. The rain is singing The roof plays her pop songs sweet Clouds dance on the street A little black boy Playing upon the blind rock A trope for lost joy Naked on the sand No season tells tropic time The sun milks the hand. The eye milks the sun For gold leaves waiting to fall No fruits on bare limbs.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 6/1/2009 4:25:00 PM
I have never seen this style haiku... its nice too see though... great write.... I gotta question. So you like my work even though it doesn't all follow your beliefs?
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Date: 5/29/2009 8:50:00 AM
I love the way you captured nature as a whole in the Haiku. The different settings of nature corresponding with the lifecycles/traits of animals were fused perfectly. ~Des Juan
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Date: 5/27/2009 8:55:00 AM
^^this was exciting! reminds me of the fun songs i sing in choir. and i could also see this made into a small children's story. good write! oh and thank you for the comment earlier!
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Date: 5/22/2009 9:28:00 PM
The sly little fox, The willy serpent, The bats cannot hear, Clouds dance on the street. What a fine way to chase the climax.
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Date: 5/16/2009 8:11:00 AM
absolutely describes the sights and sounds of our world in exquisite fusion! really fine work! L'nass!! your fourth haiku is amazingly fun!!!! Jim
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Date: 5/11/2009 6:58:00 PM
You have such a creative style and your images here are amazing. Great poetic structure in each haiku verse. Excellent work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/10/2009 4:28:00 PM
Thank you for all your wonderful comments. They inspire me to write even more. Beautiful imagery in the haiku "Clouds dance on the street" -Alley
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Date: 5/9/2009 7:36:00 PM
Loved these! Such vivid images, wonderful!
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Date: 5/7/2009 12:54:00 PM
The last haiku is the best, i love the way you completed it
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Date: 5/7/2009 10:44:00 AM
Haiku series are awesome, a lot of thought in them L'nass. This one is so playful and fun.
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Date: 5/7/2009 12:23:00 AM
Especially liked no 3 L'nass.Rgds Brian
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Date: 5/6/2009 11:25:00 PM
she-mink-sly fox!racket cricket bats!rain singing!roof plays pop!clouds dance---i love the way you do it shango---so creative and sweet---bravo
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Date: 5/6/2009 8:12:00 PM
Dear L'nass, I LOVE series Haiku I see YOU are Well Versed in this form Superb Awesome Write YOUR Talent has no boundries ALWAYS.. .HG
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Date: 5/6/2009 6:19:00 PM
This reminds me L'nass,..L'nazz,..*smiles*,..of some free style jazz! I like it! You can sell this one! james
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