Fun-Diseased World

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Inspired by Halloween hustle scenes

Avenged adult world Fishy funny kids’ play world The saturnine feast. Sorcerous* Nox night Lone places yawn hell pervades global fun-disease Ghosts grovel and then wolves weep Goblins grin skeletons sway Thus the streets savaged ********* * Roman goddess of night ====================== Date: 28th Sept'13 Dr. Ram Mehta Contest: Everything Halloween by Russell Sivey

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Skat A

Date: 5/23/2015 11:12:00 AM

DEEP HAIKU

Cherl Dunn

Date: 9/30/2013 10:43:00 AM

Trick my treat this is complicated loosen up it's holloween coming up. Although the world is falling apart, lets enjoy what we have left my friend. Go get yourself a sweet treat and just Remember for a little while was it Was like when you were young and just a kid.

Robin Davis

Date: 9/30/2013 8:10:00 AM

This is an eerie and creative write. The imagery lets the reader feel they are actually in this "monsterous" world. nice job

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/30/2013 6:52:00 AM

A mind provoking Haiku! Incomparable conception!

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 9/29/2013 10:11:00 PM

Excellent haiku with good message. Enjoyed. Tfs

Karl Marszalowicz

Date: 9/29/2013 9:35:00 AM

I like ninety percent of this poem. are you sure global fun- disease can't be something else though? Like maybe "Epidemic of Joy"?

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/29/2013 12:11:00 AM

This is one great haiku. The second stanza says it all. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Michael Walkerjohn

Date: 9/28/2013 11:19:00 PM

Aloha Dr. Mehta... funny how all hallows eve is perceived... yet the thoughts pervade each mind of the possibilities that there is a more dark and profound basis for the mask of fear you present herein... a view of irreality at its best... base upon your closing lines... thank you for the message that opens all to the dark side of one's conscience... all of the best from this life, to you, and all of your relations... Michael.