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Freedom/Responsibility

Freedom, what all I could do only.........If Freedom, not responsible to.................You Remove all the fun; please, please let me...Take The car for the night, I'll be home, obey......The Rules, all of them__promise to stop for the..Train Well he got freedom and he sped................Off Until he picked up some friends at...............The Local bar then he came to the ....................Track He'd had just one, just one too many...........It's Way too late, too late for him but he's .........Free What his life could have been, who knew......But Maybe the President or in senate.................It Is possible the first leader of love................Can't Contain my grief, if he stopped; not...............Go His life on the right track, could have gone......Anywhere (The end line is not my original idea but a direct quote form a book.)

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Date: 2/24/2010 9:25:00 AM
Dear Sara, AMAZING I have to ask Did YOU enter This in Dane-Ann's Contest If not : DO Thank-YOU for YOU being YOU YOURS ALWAYS...HG -- I have to respond to YOUR Comment on my POEM " A Different Mary " We are Family what way Did YOU read this : Beware of the Children in YOUR Response LOVE TO YOU and YOURS ALWAYS...HG
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Date: 2/6/2010 7:08:00 AM
Kool verse Sara, must try this form >> James
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Date: 2/5/2010 7:41:00 PM
I like your format. it sounds so powerful, in a way. -Always Lynette
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Date: 2/5/2010 12:39:00 AM
Very wise words Sara in this end quote.Rgds Brian
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Date: 2/4/2010 5:10:00 PM
nice, end line poem, I like the end quote worth repeating.
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Date: 2/4/2010 1:00:00 PM
this style works very well for you. john
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Date: 2/4/2010 10:41:00 AM
great job...TAH
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