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Forlorn Ice Slit Bedroom

Haiku Straying Husband forlorn ice slit bedroom frail flower between your legs... ardor expires Tanka Stay At Home Wife hours ravage ardor supple sin envelopes grey thick belly obscures erotic athletes wrestle loyalty in lieu of love

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/14/2011 5:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Gerard in Debbie Guzzi's contest "Love Talks". Love, Carol

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/14/2011 5:08:00 AM

You took something sad and added beauty and humor to it.. Congratulations Gerard on your win, love Wilma

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/13/2011 8:56:00 PM

Wow Gerard. Nice to see you at the top. Warm congrats.

Robert Pettit

Date: 3/13/2011 6:00:00 PM

Congratulations on winning in Deb's contest. This is an interesting matching of haiku and tanka. Unfortunately, many relationships break down into something like this.

John Freeman

Date: 3/13/2011 1:00:00 PM

Beautiful job, Gerard, it is wonderful to see you at the top with this worthy honor in Sixth place honorable win, Agaape, Moses

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/13/2011 12:33:00 PM

Congrats to you on your win. This was sad and funny too.BG

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/13/2011 11:51:00 AM

a well deserved win for the contest, gerard.. BIG CHEERS TO YOU! :) huggs, nette

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/13/2011 11:43:00 AM

Congratulations on the sixth place win in the contest of Debbie, Gerard

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/12/2011 7:27:00 PM

Congrats Gerard on your super win in Love Talk contest my friend with this awesome dialogue between the lovers luv.. hope all is well now in your life luv... enjoy.. and keep in touch please....

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/12/2011 4:08:00 PM

So happy to see your poem in the winners' circle, Gerard! Come and do the dance of joy. Congratulations. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/12/2011 3:51:00 PM

I kind of thought Deb would really like this one. Congratulations on a well deserved win, Gerard.

James Peranteau

Date: 3/10/2011 8:25:00 AM

This is a terrific entry Dear poet ! This write fills the brain Gerard ! Get rid of that period, and this write will go some where ! *smiles* Have a great day Sir....much love, james

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/8/2011 12:40:00 PM

After a couple ha been together for years, the ardor is often replaced by loyalty. Not a bad thing really. There's a lot of truth in this amazing poem, Gerard. Wishing you success in Deb's contest. Love, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/8/2011 6:36:00 AM

me still sees a period!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2011 10:56:00 PM

Oh,my, this one I found humorous (in a way that only the older folks can appreciate). I think neither one of us was doing real love talk with ours. hahaha. (just sick of love talk!) Sure hope this one does well and thanks for your kind comments. I enjoy your poetry mucho!

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 3/7/2011 6:49:00 PM

Remembering Judy Collins singing "I've looked at life from both sides now" . Creative. Vince

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/7/2011 6:06:00 PM

Very creative and interesting messages on both the sides with apt images, Gerard. A sure winner,

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/7/2011 6:04:00 PM

ALL good Underdog JUST [remove the period naughty! HM said NO periods in haiku] ;) VERY good entry! Light & Love

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/7/2011 4:56:00 PM

Interesting work..Good luck in the contest with this different approach..Sara