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Fork In Road

mixing words and rhyme , devote passion designed, colors and shades blend , my vision I send ,a path a mystic Irish presence , calming senses , whispers in ear to follow stay near, a path all pain considered wisdom is delivered, making the changes needed to live yet give, a path past ,present, future fate, open the gate, presently undecided the road divided, a path the long destination refuse to show desperation, a path my soul on fire my love desired, a path

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Sheri Fresonke Harper

Date: 11/17/2013 7:26:00 PM

Shanity, lovely ghazal, path's offer so much wealth of inspiration.

Skat A

Date: 11/15/2013 10:45:00 AM

Shanity, Congratulations, on your 'Take the Leap' win............ LOVE ~ SKAT

Sandra Adams

Date: 11/13/2013 11:31:00 AM

nicely penned poem...congrats on your win :)

Shanity Rain
Date: 11/13/2013 12:20:00 PM

Thank-you Sandra, It says so much about the one whom faithfully comments on others poetry and wins , for we all win when we write. I love this in you, what a beautiful spirit you have :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/12/2013 3:25:00 AM

Congratulations on the win, Shanity

Shanity Rain
Date: 11/12/2013 8:20:00 AM

Thank-you very much , this was challenging, and I love the poem ~

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 11/1/2013 3:09:00 PM

Interesting poem Shanity LOL! I've never read a Ghazal before. I say, you're going to write one of every form of poetry there is! Good Attempt here!!! MC

Shanity Rain
Date: 11/1/2013 8:06:00 PM

Thank-you ! MC you are very creative and should write one !

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/26/2013 7:23:00 AM

Hello new poet friend Shanity! Your first couplet needs adjustment IF [on a path] is your repeated word or phrase [this is called RADEEF] it MUST be on the end of both lines 1 & 2 - in the remaining couplets only on the end of the second line. The single word before that PHRASE must rhyme in lines 1,2,4,6,8,10 - the way you have started that word would be [a] BUT ..LOOK at my old blog please YOU have time THANKS Light & Love

Shanity Rain
Date: 10/26/2013 10:38:00 AM

Thank-you ! This was a form challenged for the 1st time , I was not sure about it , for I went to a poem , and saw one that had the phrase in each line ? I will go to your Blog or poems , and learn the proper format , TY !!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/26/2013 6:36:00 AM

This is quite contemporary Ghazal you have, I went with the traditional one, Shanity. Good luck in the contest if it is for that,

Shanity Rain
Date: 10/26/2013 10:35:00 AM

Thank-you , Doc..I am trying this for the 1st time , I was a little worried about the subject matter, yet ..poetry is all about love and more , much pain ! it is not my lover , I shall say that ! I am just learning this for the 1st time , I may redo..