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You stole my boyfriend Could not look me in the eye I cried bitter tears All contact is stopped I missed my childhood best friend Friendship in tatters You saw him cheating Kissing another schoolgirl Then knew how I felt! I found you sobbing We hugged and I forgave you Friendship now restored Forgiveness Senryu Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo Checked with how many syllables 08~18~16

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Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/23/2016 1:44:00 PM

Well done, Jan, a 7 for sure! Congrats on your win! Janice

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 8/23/2016 1:05:00 PM

Lesson learnt and debts settled.All's well that ends well.Loved your story Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2016 1:08:00 PM

Many thanks Sara - the poem has a happy ending that is the main thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/23/2016 12:46:00 PM

Wonderful and interesting piece, Jan...Congrats on your well deserved win...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2016 1:07:00 PM

Many thanks Olusegun:-) hugs Jan xx

Busani Zuma

Date: 8/23/2016 4:58:00 AM

am touched and I loved it

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2016 5:16:00 AM

Thanks Busani:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/22/2016 2:36:00 AM

I enjoyed your senryu story set Jan! Congratulations on your second placement! 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 8/22/2016 12:24:00 PM

I enjoyed the challenge Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/21/2016 5:10:00 PM

A great 'forgiveness' example, Jan. Congratulations on your 2nd Place win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 8/22/2016 12:24:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I'm so glad LuLoo liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 8/21/2016 12:38:00 PM

Different take on the theme Jan. A painful but sometimes necessary lesson to learn.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 1:10:00 PM

Thanks so much James - growing up is tough!:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 8/21/2016 10:43:00 AM

Jan, I have been here in high school and it is not fun at all. I am glad all was forgiven in the end...congrats on your placement and thank you very much for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 1:11:00 PM

Thanks so much Luloo - in the poem it all comes good at the end that's the important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/19/2016 11:10:00 PM

Takes 2 to tango, but forgiveness is always the best option! Great write!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2016 4:27:00 AM

Thanks my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/19/2016 3:55:00 PM

Perfect picture, best wishes in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2016 4:05:00 PM

Thanks Charlie:-) I originally said I would not use the picture feature but I do find it can enhance a poem - I occassionally post a pic to plant an idea in the reader's mind yet write about something totally different:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/19/2016 5:47:00 AM

Glad to know that this is fictional for you. This could be the worst deceit one could experience:( It would take a lot to forgive such a friend:)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2016 7:26:00 AM

I wrote the poem in a way that both girls were deceived by this love rat and it brought them back together in the end - not worth losing a best friend over a boy:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 8/19/2016 5:11:00 AM

and we have a winner surely . us lads !

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2016 7:25:00 AM

LOL:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/18/2016 8:51:00 PM

wow, Jan. I applaud you. I too did a personal story. But mine is shorter than yours. I think yours is better.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2016 3:03:00 AM

This is fiction for me Andrea but I know how such events can ruin a friendship for youngsters - I'm glad mine had a positive ending:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 8/18/2016 5:24:00 PM

The romantic pain of young teenagers! At least the realization dawned on both that he was not worth fighting over! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2016 5:55:00 PM

I hope there aren't too many young men like him Paul:-( hugs Jan xx

Messoh Vincent

Date: 8/18/2016 5:13:00 PM

So emotional and well written.... wish you well in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2016 5:54:00 PM

Thanks Messoh:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 8/18/2016 12:43:00 PM

Beautifully penned this poem. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2016 1:56:00 PM

Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/18/2016 9:06:00 AM

oh the perspective of not knowing the pain until being the one to experience. how hard relationships can be, but a nice write on forgiveness. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2016 11:27:00 AM

Relationships especially when young can cause so many issues - glad I'm finally grown up (well almost lol) :-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/18/2016 8:26:00 AM

Great sentiments on a beautiful word... A terrific Senyru, that left me smiling inside.:-) Great writing...my very best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 8/18/2016 11:28:00 AM

Thanks for your continued support Lynn:-) hugs Jan xx