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Forced To Face the Mirror

Forced to Face the Mirror I kneel before my master and rub my cheek upon his thigh; I know what comes next; I won't allow myself to cry. He tells me to stand up now, and as always, I obey; He twists my arms behind my back, and then he leads the way. He stands me before my reflection, my mortal enemy; Bruised, broken, and naked, she stares back out at me. I beg him "Please don't do this." He kisses me on the cheek; Then he turns my head to face her, this woman, scared and weak. Her body is not perfect, there are scars and deep, dark lines; He appears not to notice and rubs his fingers up my spine. He stares at my reflection til I can't stand it anymore; So I try to turn around and slink down to the floor. He catches me and lifts me up, forcing me to stand; Then gently holds me by the throat with his strong and calloused hand. He forces me to watch as he slowly drinks me in; With nothing but his eyes, he caresses my skin. I think I hear the slightest moan escaping with his breath; The thought that he's enjoying this is like a silent death. I feel his face come near my neck, he inhales my scent and soul; His lips graze my shoulder, and I almost lose control. Why will he not touch me? Does he dislike what he sees? I can make him happy if he'd just allow me to my knees! My body and mind are screaming, I need his reassuring touch; But he won't lay a finger on me, just watches... It's too much! I squeeze my eyes together. "Don't let him see you cry!" His voice cuts through the haze, the words a lullaby. "It's okay, my darling. Give to me your tears." "I will lick them from your cheeks, and kiss away your fears."

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Date: 6/9/2015 11:54:00 PM
Kristi:) congrats on your workshop poem
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Date: 5/16/2015 11:00:00 AM
Hi Kristi. This was a very gripping & honest write for me, and even though I am not very good with writing rhymes (so my judgment can't be too sound), I think that you made your lines flow very well. You take your reader with you and make them feel with you. With regards to suggestions, I don't have much to add that others haven't already pointed out (like lessening the pronouns?).
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Date: 5/15/2015 9:53:00 PM
Tight write, well done, nice flow. It has direction, mood. I think his is not needed for fingers... rubs fingers up my spine. It is good, but there are 15 "I's" I think about a dozen "you's" It would be a serious gutting of this work to tighten it and by doing so it would not be a revision, but a complete rewrite. My suggestion is not to do that, but next write, try to wean away from a few of those pronouns and filler words. Words like the, and, a, are considered filler words. Keep writing!
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 5/15/2015 9:54:00 PM
Whoops, I am tired, I meant about a dozen he's...
Date: 5/15/2015 1:58:00 AM
I like the edge of this, you can fall on either side of the blade or be sliced in any of the variable angles. This poem is slick. Well done. Suggestion: Line 4, consider dropping the second 'he'.
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Date: 5/14/2015 10:12:00 PM
I can't think of a thing to sugest? The verse is very raw with emotion. From your comments it sounds like it may have been a positive experience for you. We all have different backgounds to deal with for some this might have been viewed as abuse. No matter, it is a well writen verse. Light & Love
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Kristi Leigh
Date: 5/17/2015 12:13:00 PM
Thank you! I'm kinda baffled because a couple people have suggested an air of abuse around it... it wasn't like that at all... just very intense.
Date: 5/14/2015 7:28:00 PM
this is a heart felt poem Kristi, I enjoyed every couplet :-), A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Kristi Leigh
Date: 5/14/2015 7:48:00 PM
Thank you so much! I'm very new to doing anything creative so I don't have any other poetry to share. But, now that I've written something and feel fairly proud of it, I'm going to try and find the time to write more often. As soon as I am able, I will be glad to share. Everyone here is very kind and welcoming.
Date: 5/14/2015 6:35:00 PM
Kristi, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Kristi Leigh
Date: 5/14/2015 7:44:00 PM
Thank you! There isn't much to tell, really. I'm a stay at home mom with 5 children. My husband is a musician, plays guitar with a prominent band in our area. And, I've never written anything before so I feel like I may have discovered something new about myself! I hope to find time to write more in the future. I've been toying with something in my head... I'd like to write something about the moon from the perspective of the ocean. I'd like to show my husband how he makes me feel like the moon must make the sea feel. Maybe I'll be able to tackle it soon and share! Thanks again for your kind welcome!
Date: 5/13/2015 10:09:00 PM
Thanks so much. I've never written anything before, but I was so moved by the experience I described in the poem, I felt compelled to write about it in order to make sense of it in my head. I've come to understand that I was so moved by this experience partly because I used to be a model, young and beautiful. After five children, I am slowly starting to see the effects age and experience has on my body. However, I don't believe my husband has noticed yet. I'm so flattered that y'all enjoyed it!
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Date: 5/13/2015 9:34:00 PM
WOW.. powerful stuff here Kristi and so poignantly expressed. Welcome to our friendly P/Soup family. You have a great writing talent.. keep exploring it. xx~xx
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Date: 5/13/2015 6:20:00 PM
This is a fascinating poem, Kristi. I see a dilemma mirrored on her face; satisfaction on his. You leave the reader with a lot of unanswered questions to work out. The human mind is complex. Excellent poem by which you present yourself on Soup. Welcome, and keep your pen busy! // paul
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