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Footle----Invitation

See you soon This afternoon! dunno if it's done right, plz help....lol.....always maryam*

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Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/12/2009 4:20:00 PM

Well, this is cute. I know you know hoe to do it now. Sorry I missed this before! Its a practice footle!

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/6/2009 12:31:00 PM

Looks good to me:) !! Carrie

Christopher Higgins

Date: 2/6/2009 12:01:00 PM

I dunno if its done right either but it is good..keep up the good work.

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/6/2009 11:53:00 AM

Maryam - I can't answer that but it makes sense to me - god Bless, MJ

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/6/2009 11:08:00 AM

I totally agree with Deirdre, the rhyme and idea are great, in fact excellent reading. Give it another shot, you'll do great. Michael

Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 2/6/2009 11:02:00 AM

Maryam!. idea great, rhyming perfect BUT you can only have 2 syllables in each line and the content must be reflected in the name of what you are doing the footle on. So you should express that in the title. Go again and you will have the perfect footle before the night is out. I am only an amateur but that's my understanding of it. Déirdre