Floating Piercer

A butterfly Bit me cry I I sigh, the pain Russell Sivey

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/18/2011 10:47:00 PM

this is an awesome title for what that nitwit butterfly did! I hope people don't take my stuff seriously like the sod poem. Honestly, that was DANG hard to write becuase it's very difficult to line up four rhymes that fit two one-syllable nouns. Very limiting it was!! Not really a great form in my opinion, but at least I can say that I tried one. LUv, Andrea

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 8/13/2011 10:51:00 AM

Tough form which I have not tried yet...but you ahve done it nicely...Michael

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/13/2011 10:25:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this one..Very creative and good use of the form..Good luck if entered in the contest..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/12/2011 11:09:00 PM

such lovely creatures .. did not know they bite luv.. but a love bite perhaps..thankxx for your gracious compliments and comments on my poetry.. I so admire your work as well luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/12/2011 9:16:00 PM

Nice attempt at Than bauk, Russell