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Flight 4u 9525

(tragic flight 4U 9525) banging on a door in vain; in desperation cries rose franticly; deaf to all, beyond the door, he slowly aimed the nose down ----------------------------------- Contest: One New Tanka Sponsor: Rick Parise 2nd April, 2015

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2015 4:12:00 PM

Like the crash itself, this poem leaves an IMPACT. Strong stuff. I really like it, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/29/2015 3:25:00 PM

Glad you liked this one, Andrea. // Still making my way back slowly to Soup:) All the best. // paul

James Fraser

Date: 4/5/2015 2:21:00 PM

I still can't believe how calculated this person was to have done what he did. So so sad :( All the best in Rick's contest, reads like another winner // James....

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2015 3:06:00 PM

You are correct, James. A person's mind is a complicated thing; hard to understand how it reacts under pressure. A calculated move does not necessarily imply that it is a clear move. (Thank you for the faith you show in my Tanka, but I'm not expecting to be on the winners' list....) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/5/2015 1:55:00 AM

that's a horrible tragic sad even that I 'm praying I;'ll never be in.. great!//olive eloisa

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2015 10:04:00 AM

Yes, it was a very tragic incident that effected the lives of many; we'll be flying with an uneasy feeling:( hugs // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 4/4/2015 2:06:00 AM

Just when I think that your work can't get any more gooderer, Paul, it gets gooderer. One of your gooderest. Difficult to encapsulate terror and hold the moment in 5 lines, but you pulled it off. Good luck, not that you need it. Regards, Viv. Ps- my grammar is improving slowerer but suriest.

Viv Wigley
Date: 4/4/2015 8:44:00 AM

You mean it's getting 'grammerer'. Come on, Paul, get in the groove. Or get grooverer :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2015 8:19:00 AM

Thank you Viv! You are too kind! Better 'gooderest' than 'badderest'! see, even my grammar is improving:) // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/2/2015 8:02:00 PM

impressive! you've told the whole story in 5 short lines. nice one, paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2015 7:32:00 AM

Thank you Ilene. That must have been a terrifying ten minutes. I pity all on board...and their relatives. All the best. // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/2/2015 8:01:00 PM

wow. awesomely written, I was in that moment, you are good Paul~! hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2015 7:29:00 AM

Thank you Casarah. Your comments are always lovely and encouraging. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 4/2/2015 4:51:00 PM

oh Paul what a topical tanka - so so sad:-( Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/3/2015 7:27:00 AM

Hi Jan! It is a sad topic; I am so sorry for the relatives of the innocent victims. Hugs // paul