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I’d caught you with her in your arms, in my heart I knew you’d not cheat- but you flashed HER that smile; that smile reserved for me ... it was such a tender moment as you cradled our baby girl! HEXASTICH IT Poetry Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud 05/26/20

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John Hamilton

Date: 6/3/2020 9:25:00 PM

Very clever Jan...got me...nice write nice win!

Joseph May

Date: 5/30/2020 6:50:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan..

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2020 2:21:00 AM

thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 5/30/2020 3:55:00 PM

A pleasure to return with congratulations, Jan! A most deserved podium finish! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 4:30:00 PM

Thanks Paul I am delighted to be on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/30/2020 12:10:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. WOW, a great story/poem in just 6 lines. Enjoy your win and day............

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 12:32:00 PM

thanks Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/30/2020 11:10:00 AM

This is such a sweet one with a brilliant twist. Love the way your words maintain the mystery till the last line. Congratulations on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:32:00 AM

Thanks Aditi:-) hugs Jan x

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/30/2020 11:08:00 AM

now this verse certainly made my jaw drop ( smiling) with your unexpected turn, jan!... congrats on your high placement in my contest... huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:09:00 AM

Thanks Nette you asked for a twist and I delivered:-) hugs jan x

David Mohn

Date: 5/30/2020 11:01:00 AM

congratulations Jan...this is unique and wonderful :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:08:00 AM

Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/30/2020 5:33:00 AM

Glad this won, Jan. It's amazing - Congrats and love to you in Christ, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:08:00 AM

Thanks Gina:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt

Date: 5/30/2020 12:56:00 AM

Aww, fighting back a little tear right now. This describes me 27 years ago. A tender write, dear Jan, with a lovely finish. Well done, and congratulations on your win. Hugs ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:08:00 AM

Aww so glad you can relate. Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani

Date: 5/30/2020 12:30:00 AM

So cute and sweet. Father's love does get divided, esp. for a daughter. Congrats Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:07:00 AM

Thanks Mohan:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenish Somadas

Date: 5/29/2020 11:18:00 PM

Sweet verse..Great win Jan..Congrats..

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:07:00 AM

Thanks Jenish:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 5/28/2020 11:10:00 AM

What a beautiful take on the "flash" prompt, Jan! Such a tender moment! Undoubtedly no jealous feelings here, though initially you led me astray:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2020 11:07:00 AM

thanks Paul Nette said she wanted a twist and I tried to deliver it:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/28/2020 7:20:00 AM

This is gorgeous for it is true.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2020 10:01:00 AM

thanks Caren:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/27/2020 6:06:00 PM

She is going to love this Jan. I love the surprise ending! This poem made me smile and gave me much cheer today. Thank you Jan. blessings

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 7:08:00 PM

thanks for dropping by Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/27/2020 1:03:00 PM

Great surprise Jan. Well done :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 2:10:00 PM

Thanks Heidi hope you are feeling much better, its good to see you my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/27/2020 9:17:00 AM

Jan, this is a WONDER - a work of art - so creative and insightful and simply amazing. I LOVE it. faving it... Love to you, Gina

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 2:09:00 PM

Thanks for your sweet comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Quoth Theraven

Date: 5/27/2020 9:11:00 AM

Jan, A little tongue in cheek in this warm and witty poem. And a cheeky E ticket ride. Good luck. -Richard

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 2:09:00 PM

Thanks Richard:-) hugs Jan x

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/26/2020 6:58:00 PM

Well done Jan … here I was being led up the garden path and then hearing a voice 'don't jump to conclusions' - great Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 2:09:00 PM

The sponsor was looking for a twist at the end, from the comments I think I have delivered:-) hugs Jan x

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/26/2020 4:09:00 PM

oh, you got me, jan! great ending!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/27/2020 2:08:00 PM

Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 5/26/2020 2:22:00 PM

Jan doing the twist? What a treat! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2020 2:48:00 PM

Thanks Rico:-) I like to do the odd twist at the end of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/26/2020 12:39:00 PM

- ... love the end ... it wasn't like I thought ... luck in the contest, Jan :) -hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2020 2:08:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/26/2020 12:11:00 PM

Oh, Ah! A quick little emotional journey this, great write! (toying with my emotions!) xomo :)))

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2020 12:18:00 PM

thanks Mo, hope you are ok:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/26/2020 11:47:00 AM

I wondered where this was going Janand was so happy to see the sweet reprieve !! I really enjoyed it, Good Luck xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2020 11:47:00 AM

Glad you like the twist at the end:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 5/26/2020 11:41:00 AM

Lovely write Jan..best wishes in the Contest

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2020 11:47:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx