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FISH OUT OF WATER

am I more valid when I am in water I am apt to explore outside my bubble a gurgle of spoken word unknown on my scales the weight of air I swim through the sky the dream scares the girl for me it’s divine ‘fore I reach the pinnacle she’s pinched liquid eyes open to prison of glass

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Harsha Singh

Date: 12/20/2023 9:12:00 PM

Awesome

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/7/2023 6:37:00 AM

Way to go with this creative winner in Suzette's contest. Congratulations to you. Sara K

Suzette Richards

Date: 12/6/2023 3:53:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement, Kim. If you would like to have a copy of the tables as mentioned on the contest page, please soup mail me your e-mail address. Regards, Suzette

Hilo Poet

Date: 12/3/2023 8:51:00 AM

Great use of Suze's apparent virgining properties. Thanks, Kim, for hitting perfection head-on. Aloha, William

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:20:00 AM

Thank you, William! :)

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 12/3/2023 4:53:00 AM

I am not familiar with this style of poetry, but you are definitely not a fish out of water when it comes to amazing talent.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:21:00 AM

Thank you kindly, Jerry!

Bill Baker

Date: 12/2/2023 6:53:00 PM

Unique and intriguing poetry, Kim. Good luck in the contest. You are a very creative poet, my friend. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:21:00 AM

Thank ayou, Kindly, Bill! Blessings!

Paige Hind

Date: 12/2/2023 4:51:00 PM

This is filled with haunting emotions, a real pleasure to read as well, I felt the girl in your poem...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Paige. As a child I dreamt of fish swimming through the air…an uncomfortable dream.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/2/2023 4:18:00 PM

not familiar with this form, but your words are beautiful. Delightful title! I liked "liquid eyes open to prison of glass." enjoy your evening, Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Sara!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/2/2023 9:16:00 AM

wow, great job with this, Kim, you are great with metaphors. Question for you in Soupmail.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/4/2023 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea! Here’s hoping!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/2/2023 5:45:00 AM

I don't know the form but I love the voice of your poem, my friend. A pleasure to read and reflect on!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/2/2023 6:02:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay! In the form, the syllable count for each line must be a prime number.