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Holmdel Park, NJ, is where I fell in love for the first time. It still seems like a magical place to me.

The arboretum looks as it did then With silver maples dancing in the breeze Wildflowers bloom within the narrow glen Remember how we kissed beneath the trees? One special oak displays the heart you carved With our initials set within its wall We were so young and yet our souls seemed starved So passionate are teens when first they fall Today I came to view the art we left Surrounded by the blooms, the trees, the birds And though my heart seeks you, I am bereft Of promises defined by long lost words I miss that passion coursing through our veins Now you have left and loneliness remains June 10, 2020

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/28/2020 1:14:00 PM

Hello Caroline, a beautiful poem of love. Yet sad that he left. A love gone wrong? Enjoy your day my friend.

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 6/28/2020 10:58:00 AM

You have sketch a lasting beauty which lives in our mind and heart always but sometimes these memories come out, when the poetry brush falls in the hands of great poet like you dear friend Carolyn. Beautiful lines..” Today I came to view the art we left Surrounded by the blooms, the trees, the birds And though my heart seeks you, I am bereft Of promises defined by long lost words” With best wishes always.....Ravindra

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 6/28/2020 10:57:00 AM

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/27/2020 3:22:00 PM

Such beautiful memories in what looks like a beautiful place, Carolyn. I was born about 100 miles from there in Mt. Holly. I love New Jersey but could never live through the winters. Thanks for sharing your bittersweet sonnet...a fave for me. Blessings, Rhonda xx

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 6/23/2020 6:30:00 AM

Wow such a beautiful lovely poem and setting of young love and the carving of initials on trees, great ideas to reminisce about , sad that the love has left, was wondering if it meant he passed away or separation? Kudos for an awesome poem. Plz pleez do read and comment my newest piece, a prose and do also read the articles and data I have copy pasted in comment section below the poem so you will confirm the matter further.

Arturo Michael

Date: 6/19/2020 6:55:00 PM

A lovely memory...in vivid imagery...

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/17/2020 11:07:00 PM

Carolyn, this sonnet is so beautiful and stirring, so many lines reached my heart, but especially 'promises defined by long lost words' - a truly magical poem-

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/17/2020 8:14:00 PM

Hello Carolyn … a fine written sonnet. Those memories of our youth are such treasures that keep asking us what might have been - thank you Carolyn - Lindsay

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/17/2020 12:43:00 AM

I go with all of the wonderful comments, here, Carolyn, and would like to add, how much i love the sincerity of it all, i believe it is the personification that comes through for me, when reading, one really does feel there is a very special lady, behind the pen...

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/17/2020 2:26:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comment, Harry. I'll go and check your page.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/16/2020 1:32:00 PM

This is an exceptionally fine sonnet, Carolyn--very descriptive and poignant. Janice

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/16/2020 10:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A beautiful poem and picture. Enjoy your win and day...............

John Hamilton

Date: 6/15/2020 11:00:00 AM

A beautiful write Carolyn, sorry it didn't place in my contest, I was looking for a passionate write, this was more a nature write, but it is beautiful writing!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/14/2020 4:37:00 PM

Aw, this is so sweet, Carolyn!! Bittersweet, of course, now... You know, some New Jersey parks look eerily alike. There's one in Springfield, NJ that looks so much like this one. (My daughter was remarried in a synagogue across the street). Then there's another one in Elizabeth, NJ, on North Avenue, which is almost a carbon copy. Amazing! Thanks, Gershon

John Watt

Date: 6/14/2020 2:26:00 AM

This is so wonderful, Carolyn. Equal parts nostalgia, romance, and longing. It reminds me of the summer heat of young love many years ago. Great sonnet flow, rhyme, and meter. This is a winner to me. Hugs ~ John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/13/2020 7:39:00 PM

This is outstanding, Carolyn. I love how you made it so personal too. One of your best for me, so a FAVE

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/13/2020 1:32:00 PM

Touching, Sentimental, charming, cute sweet and very creative - your memories of your first love are so sweet, so cute and so real, teenagers and old people fall in love passionately! Blessings my dear friend, I have missed you and your awesome poetry. Jennifer.

Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/13/2020 1:08:00 PM

So touchy, so nice. I am charmed. Hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/12/2020 7:56:00 PM

This is very romantic and touched by sadness of what could have been Carolyn. There is nothing quite as powerful as young love. Beautiful! I am in a rush to pick up my car. I will be back to read more. Blessings xxoo

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2020 10:05:00 AM

I meant to fave this Carolyn. Done! xxoo

Joseph May

Date: 6/12/2020 3:05:00 PM

Memories still carved on the heart, where "silver maples dance in the breeze", Beautiful write, yet sadness lingers...

John Gondolf

Date: 6/12/2020 8:03:00 AM

Memories of past loves are always beautiful and sometimes sad at the same time. A very touching sonnet, Carolyn, best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John

Paul Callus

Date: 6/12/2020 3:47:00 AM

So beautiful and heartfelt, Carolyn. Isn't it wonderful when you can go back to the roots of special memories! First love will dwell in your mind for ever more. Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/12/2020 12:47:00 PM

While we do tend to romanticize our first loves, I still believe this boy was special. Thanks for reading!

Michael Tor

Date: 6/11/2020 11:19:00 PM

Heartfelt Sonnet Carolyn. Touched my heart...

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/11/2020 4:15:00 PM

A beautiful sonnet, Carolyn! It flows with lovely images of bittersweet memories and a hint if summer heat. :) I hope you are doing well ..best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Rhonda xx

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/12/2020 1:02:00 PM

I know this has been a tough time for many, Rhonda. Just trying my best to cope. Hope you are well! I'll visit your page now.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/11/2020 3:46:00 PM

A magical place indeed, Carolyn--your poem dwells in splendid memories of love--a beautifully written, poem, as always! All the best.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/11/2020 2:44:00 PM

- A wonderful poem, Carolyn ... best wishes in the contest :) - Stay safe and well :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/12/2020 1:14:00 PM

Thanks for visiting, Sunshine!