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He gazed at her stunning beauty She coyly avoids his piercing eyes Both hoping that true love can be Each dreaming will you be my prize Love blossoms for others to see Such sweet romance without any lies Wavy gold hair frames her lovely face Davy gently takes hold of her hand When they dance she’s so full of grace Both feel so at ease, its so grand Lips meet in a secret embrace They both pray their parents understand Contest:- Quatret – Isaiah Zerbst 07~16~15

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Lycia Harding

Date: 7/31/2015 10:37:00 AM

Jan, this is so sweet. Congrats on your win, my Dear! xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 2:43:00 PM

Thanks Lycia:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/30/2015 2:43:00 PM

Such a sweet romantic write, Jan! Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 2:50:00 PM

Thanks so much Laura I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/30/2015 1:19:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning work Jan! Amazing!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:53:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 7/30/2015 1:09:00 AM

Congrats Jan. lovely poem......Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:52:00 AM

Thanks Seren I've got a lot of catching up to do for contest congrats - not had chance to read any winning poems yet:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2015 3:43:00 PM

YAYYY and congrats to sweet jan!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2015 6:05:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) your poem was stunnnninggggg:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/29/2015 3:24:00 PM

Perfection indeed…Way to go with this win..Congrats!!Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2015 6:04:00 PM

Thanks Sara - it took a lot of time and effort to get this finished - I am so pleased Isaiah liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

Lee Carter

Date: 7/29/2015 2:31:00 PM

Sweet romance congrats on your win Jan! ~lee

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2015 6:03:00 PM

Thanks Lee:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/29/2015 1:46:00 AM

back to congratulate you on your great win, Jan! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2015 6:50:00 AM

Thanks Kim - yours was outstanding - congrats again:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter

Date: 7/22/2015 9:39:00 PM

Jan, I adore this. It has that Jan Allison touch; nothing more need be said. Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 2:06:00 AM

Aww thanks Paul it was a real challenge to write - I started it before my muse deserted me for 2 weeks so I just managed to scrape in to the contest at the last moment lol:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 7/18/2015 2:27:00 PM

I still remember my first kiss. I'm glad today that people decide for themselves whom they date, but it's also good that parents can have their say if needed, or to be needed, hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/18/2015 2:46:00 PM

Yes I'm so glad we have the freedom to choose goodness only knows who my parents would have picked for me lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/17/2015 5:10:00 PM

Hi Jan...this first kiss is wrapped in romantic bliss. It takes us back to the time when parents had a good say in match-making! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 5:20:00 PM

Thanks Paul I don't think it will ever go back to those days:-( hugs Jan xx

Daver Austin

Date: 7/17/2015 2:47:00 PM

Love this "good old days" picture and poem. I grew up in the sweaty hand era and my first kiss was grand. Love, daver

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 3:02:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by - I love the image too Daver - how things have changed with the times:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/17/2015 1:54:00 PM

- Jan, this is really beautiful ! - A winning poems in my eyes (7) - Good luck, I cross my fingers for you - I wish you a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/17/2015 2:00:00 PM

- Here it is raining 14-16 C + ...... not so much to brag about :) ..... but hope.... I always do :)))

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 1:57:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise - lets hope our weekend is filled with sunshine:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 7/17/2015 10:07:00 AM

This poetic trip though the heart is, innocent, descriptive, and creative all rolled up into a beautiful poem of young love. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 12:14:00 PM

Thanks Emile always a delight to hear from you:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jack Ellison

Date: 7/17/2015 6:32:00 AM

You romantic devil, you! BEAUTIFUL... should be a winner! Love and huggs, Jack xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 6:35:00 AM

Not sure if I have it right Jack but I did struggle with the challenge Isaiah set us so I hope he likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/17/2015 5:16:00 AM

Yes up there with the very best quatrains i've read...takes me back. lovely poetry Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 5:39:00 AM

Thanks Harry:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/17/2015 12:03:00 AM

My first kiss was on my own arm practicing, now this, this was far more romantic than my first kiss!!!! Hugs!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/17/2015 4:38:00 AM

Hope you have had a bit of practice for real since then Arthur lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2015 7:11:00 PM

VEry sweet, Jan. did you take the inspiration from the picture or did you write it first per Isaiahs' rules and then find a picture for it? I'd say a lot of it is using the right meter! and you are not alone. I am not seeing many that have the meter correct all the way through.. I'm sure he will like this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 7:34:00 PM

I wrote it first - part of it was written before i found my muse deserted me ... I finished it yesterday and then found an image to post with it - I just write and hope he likes it:-) hugs jan xx xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/16/2015 7:07:00 PM

Perfect flow, young love and its mysteries! I remember such times so long ago. A7 Great write.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 7:33:00 PM

Thanks Robert:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/16/2015 6:14:00 PM

whho, smooth flow of piece, jan... dance on!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 6:17:00 PM

Thanks Nette I feel it could do with more work but it is too late now:-) am just pleased to have got it posted in time:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 7/16/2015 5:23:00 PM

A definite 7 here. You took this picture and made it your own.Such a sweet romantic tale of first love. Kudos for this little love story. Janet

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 5:28:00 PM

Thanks Janet I don't think I have it quite right but it is a complicated challenge set by Isaiah - at least I completed it I started the poem before my muse deserted me for nearly 2 weeks and it is finally finished:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman

Date: 7/16/2015 3:56:00 PM

Hello Jan, This is a wonderful write. I'm not sure of the parameters for the contest, but you poem here does read well. I know in the contests the people heading them up look for certain things. I saw Jerry's note below and sensed the degree of difficulty. Best of Luck in the contest, and regardless of the outcome, I really like this write. A "7" Too!! Best Wishes, Gary

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 3:59:00 PM

Thanks Gary I don't think I have the meter right but I was focussing on getting the syllable count and rhyme - if I don't place I am fine with that:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 7/16/2015 3:32:00 PM

You Know, Isaiah hosts the best contests by choosing the best subjects, even though I don't always make the cut---I think he brings out the best in us. Well done Jan and Good Luck

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 3:36:00 PM

I don't think I have got it right Jerry but given it my best shot - if I don't place I know why - I found it a real challenge to write:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 7/16/2015 3:27:00 PM

Very Romantic, Jan, I'm not sure the form is correct. There's something about the stress, too. , unstressed, unstressed stressed. etc. Did you read the example he gave. I tried to write the quatret but gave it up. To hard for me but I'm glad you are giving it your best efforts. I could not find your flag poem. Did you post it yet? Darlene

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 3:34:00 PM

I struggled with the stressed unstressed - the only stress was on me lol - I focussed on getting it to rhyme - if I don't place I know why:-) hugs Jan xx

Mama Bear

Date: 7/16/2015 2:51:00 PM

Oh to remember first kisses and first loves. Nothing shabby about late in life kisses either though LOL Sorry have not been visiting Love and Hugs Edith

Mama Bear
Date: 7/16/2015 3:05:00 PM

Ah the dancing shoes are back on and back to almost being myself. Thanks Many hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2015 2:55:00 PM

oh Mama bear it is always a delight to see you - you focus on getting your strength back and putting those dancing shoes back on - comments can take a back seat my friend! Hugs Jan xx