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First Halloween

children's laughter a boy and girl carve out a jack-o-lantern deep orange pumpkin gutted the scent of roasted brown seeds gasps - - the small lantern's grin and eyes are lit by flickering candle light The eerie light's shadows danced A coyote howled in tune an owl hoots - - the moon emerges from clouds as bats flap across the sky Full moon reveals surprises Ghosts' wispy gown races fast shrieks and giggles - - little fingers drop candy and point towards the sky A tiny night rider floats Little eyelids close softly written by Jack Horne and Sara Kendrick for Diane's contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/7/2014 1:31:00 PM
Congrats on the win... Loved it from the youngkids point of view.
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Date: 11/6/2014 12:00:00 PM
- A little late .....But, I will congratulate you with a 2nd place Jack and Sara - a great winning poems! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/5/2014 7:16:00 AM
Great job, both of you, :)
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Date: 11/4/2014 7:10:00 PM
This was awesome...congrats
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Date: 11/4/2014 6:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Jack and Sara. There's something magical about this great poem.
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Date: 11/4/2014 1:20:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Jack and Sara:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/4/2014 1:10:00 PM
This is splendid, Jack and Sara. I like the way you blended couplets and haiku to create great images. Congratulations on your second place!
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Date: 10/26/2014 10:07:00 AM
Hi Jack! Thanks for dropping by! That last two lines made me do a double take and made me think there was an actual ghost floating by-- could it be Casper? Very fun Halloween poem, with a lot of the familiar elements blended here-- great collab from you and Sara! I enjoyed reading this and I hope all is well with you, dear jack (o'lantern)-- forgive me, I can't resist!!
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Date: 10/18/2014 9:04:00 AM
The yin and yang of orange and black. You both have versed with aplomb and knack. Peace. :)
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Date: 10/16/2014 1:32:00 PM
jack, eerie yet so experiential and delightful in its poetic approach...what a great tandem, you and sara... huggs
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Date: 10/16/2014 9:45:00 AM
The whole spooky evening. Brings back memories. Like the sandman ending. Love, daver
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Date: 10/15/2014 3:53:00 PM
wow, you two did GREAT here. I really loved the part about the ghost, the way it was described was so creative.
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Date: 10/15/2014 3:26:00 PM
The finished product is okay..Thanks for all the visits to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/15/2014 2:09:00 PM
A top7 rating for this awesome write Jack & Sara!! Rengay form is new to me, but the content is no surprise, coming from two talented writers. Love the innocent pleasures of a young child enjoying its first Halloween...especially the gasps of excitement....and finally the contented falling off to sleep. Well done. // paul
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Date: 11/5/2014 3:10:00 PM
Hi Jack...back with merited congratulations....paul
Date: 10/15/2014 2:08:00 PM
Great poem on Halloween! I'm sure you'll do well in the contest!
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Date: 10/15/2014 1:24:00 PM
I love this Jack. It 's lots of fun. GL
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Date: 10/15/2014 1:22:00 PM
Wow this is brilliant I thoroughly enjoyed this collaboration - good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx
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