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First Dance

that evening the music played soft and sweet then he smiled and swept me off my feet the night perfect for romance did he come by chance? pounding heart dance cupid's dart a first kiss perchance? at my lips a furtive glance wonder if he can hear my heart beat that evening the music played soft and sweet
Suggested Name for form--An Hour Glass

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/27/2015 10:49:00 PM
nice win. SKAT
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Date: 2/24/2015 1:07:00 AM
Great romantic write,, Congrats on big win!
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Date: 2/23/2015 6:56:00 PM
Lovely romantic poem, Barbara. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/23/2015 2:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Barbara! How romance arrived by chance with this first dance! I love it...merits a top rating!#7 Pity about the syllable count...this had all the makings of a podium finish. // paul
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Date: 2/23/2015 11:55:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win BG
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Date: 2/23/2015 11:39:00 AM
'a first kiss perchance' 'the night perfect for romance' nice lines. Congrats.
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Date: 2/23/2015 8:20:00 AM
Love the romance! Congrats.
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Date: 2/23/2015 7:46:00 AM
Wonderful and romantic , well done on your win~
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Date: 2/23/2015 2:14:00 AM
dropping back with my congrats Barbara:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/23/2015 12:52:00 AM
Barbara, this was really sweet. I was checking syllable counts very closely and noticed your first and last line were off. probably you were putting 'evening' at 3 syllables instead of 2. other than that, it followed my rules excellently. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 2/15/2015 11:46:00 AM
An Awesome write dear poet, and yes, I've seen several oin the past...poems, shaped like an hour glass, this could indeed be a fun form ! Hey, lets put a lil' life into these writes !...Not that there isn't already..... ;) have a wonderful week Barbara.....much love, james
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Date: 2/14/2015 1:33:00 AM
beautiful!
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Date: 2/13/2015 7:29:00 PM
wow Barbara you nailed this complicated form - it took me hours to write mine - you have done an amazing job 7 and good luck for the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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