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Finish With a Deep Breath

Inhale deeply the sweet aromas of the air As you follow her religiously down the stair. And when you enter her cave with true heart You will never again want to part. Close your eyes and see her more clearly As your heart will pull her to you more dearly. Reach out to her to take her by the hand No words needed, for the dance is planned. Her waist you gently touch as she takes her stance Waiting for your lead, as you begin the dance. Nonstop you whirl her around the floor A couple gliding gracefully, enticing the other's step even more. Walking back to a table where Champagne awaits Remembering still, her gently swayed gaits. Your glasses clink, your hearts pounding as both take a sip A gasp of delight, thankful for the respite and this little nip. Breathe again, Inhaling deeply. written by: Dan Cwiak ` 1/8/16 For: Mystic Rose Collaboration Contest

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Funom Makama

Date: 3/5/2016 11:17:00 AM

Wonderful! Wonderful! So so so wonderful....

Dan Cwiak
Date: 3/7/2016 4:35:00 PM

Thank you, Funom. I thought only of the times that I enjoyed the dance and partner, that I had to write this to fulfill the criteria of the contest. I thought it would do better, but apparently some the judges didn't think it was worthy of a mention. Thanks for stopping to read and your comments.

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/11/2016 7:25:00 PM

This is a fine jewel my friends. Smooth all the way and I can not see a difference in the writing . Its as if one poet wrote it all and that takes great talent from both writers to pull off.A7

Dan Cwiak
Date: 1/12/2016 1:31:00 PM

Thank you, Robert. I appreciate your kind comments.

Casarah Nance

Date: 1/8/2016 5:38:00 PM

Breathtaking, nicely done :)

Dan Cwiak
Date: 1/8/2016 8:26:00 PM

Thank you, Casarah. I appreciate your read and comments very much.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/8/2016 4:32:00 PM

very romantic Dan:-) hugs Jan xx

Dan Cwiak
Date: 1/8/2016 4:46:00 PM

Thanks, Jan. I was updating when you put in your comment and I am just hoping it will be good enough for Mystic Rose' contest "Breathe". l appreciate your read and comments very much.

Constance La France

Date: 1/8/2016 4:27:00 PM

Dan , so beautifully romantic, I am loving this 7

Dan Cwiak
Date: 1/8/2016 4:42:00 PM

Thank you, B W. It is for Mystic Rose' Contest "Breathe". I am glad you stopped and for your generous comment.