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Finding My Inner Porpoise Rhyme Schema

She kept TELLING, YELLING at me, to GO with the FLOW, to write with a GLOW. How? My mind feels too SLOW to capture the UNDERTOW! I try rising to the SURFACE with my VERSES. yet I wander from PURPOSE, bam the bottom or a boat. Feeling like a dazed PORPOISE, stranded and stunned! Desiring the protection, of a TORTOISE shell Underwater there's no way to YELL for help My voice muted like broken BELL not able to sing Vocal chords locked by an ancient SPELL A mind cracked and confused With a story to TELL Up was up until it FELL Wanting to THRIVE, a member of a pod or HIVE With words I feel ALIVE In unison I FLY and DIVE through liquid space Not noticing the warning SIGNS up ahead My words are more than nursery RHYMES The arbrators of more and lesser TIMES multiplied by NINES Here swimming within discarded LINES They are articulations born to be, stringed together. With each one I arrive at the end of myself My BEGINNING is my ENDING within this ocean TRANSCENDING Words CURVING and BENDING Temporarily used we are all PRETENDING HOPING LESSENING Afraid of OFFENDING Worried what message we are SENDING Some are gentle others SHARKS Eyes that glow through water like SPARKS Yet some eyes are cold and DARK Destiny of man a cryptic MARK Floated on this water in an ancient Ark So I swim to the SURFACE lifted on my CURSiVE Not wishing to be DIVERSIVE, ELUSIVE or COERSIVE I swim in circles going deeper DOWN If I drink your air I'll surely DROWN Come to my water, filter my SOUND I am your lost and FOUND Feel the Earth's pulse within me POUND Circular in motion my spirit flows Within LIQUIDITY, I am bound yet FREE Tossing and turning it escapes from ME Morphed beyond this endless SEA Water evaporates to become what it must BE Nourishing ground, rain helps form the TREES Carried in sheets upon the BREEZE Sometimes into ice the vapors FREEZE The ground like rock it will APPEASE When in spring like our thoughts it THAWS No longer DAZED or CONFUSED Much more aware just a little BRUISED List of words used in my word play. Telling Yelling Go Flow Glow Slow Undertow Surface Verses Purpose Porpoise Tortoise Yell Bell Spell Tell Fell Thrive Hive Alive Fly Dive Signs Rhymes Times Nines Lines Beginning Ending Transcending Curving Bending Pretending Hoping Lessening Offending Sending Sharks Sparks Bark Mark Ark Surface Cursive Diversive Elusive Coercive Down Drown Sound Found Pound Liquidity Free Me Sea Be Trees Breeze Freeze Appease Thaws Applause Dazed Confused Bruised Sorry Verlena my tablet won't let me access bold or italic. 65 words I cheated two at the beginning and added three at the end.

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Date: 7/11/2014 1:24:00 PM
Very good, Richard...better than mine. You should have been closer to the top. Congratulations.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/12/2014 9:04:00 AM
You are kind, I enjoyed yours very much.
Date: 7/10/2014 8:49:00 PM
Congratulations, Richard, remarkable use of rhyme and word play...Verlena made this one a fun experiment. Like with over-alliteration, over-rhyme gets wordy and tough to chew; but stranger things have happened.
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Date: 7/10/2014 5:52:00 PM
Congratulations, Richard! Another write rhyming in originality. Not at all an easy task; well executed! // paul
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Date: 7/10/2014 7:09:00 AM
Wow a creative masterpiece Richard! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 7/10/2014 5:10:00 AM
Congrats .my friend on the win
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Date: 7/9/2014 11:26:00 PM
Nice Richard. I enjoyed this immensely. Congratulations on your top placement. Verlena
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Date: 6/29/2014 12:21:00 PM
I think you are short a few rhymes if I counted correctly
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Date: 6/28/2014 7:59:00 AM
Great, I'm gonna give this contest a go to, reading yours it makes more sense, yours was cool though, I don't think I can top it, :) Hope the teacher doesn't flunk us both for me looking at your paper, ;-) hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2014 8:10:00 AM
I don't know if I did it right but that's how I interpreted the instructions.I am sure you will do great.
Date: 6/19/2014 8:33:00 AM
Great write Richard... and a great ending line...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2014 8:11:00 AM
Thanks Joseph
Date: 6/14/2014 4:26:00 PM
I must go see what this is all about? Thanks for the romp! Light & Love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/14/2014 4:33:00 PM
Thanks for your visits Debbie, much appreciated.
Date: 6/13/2014 2:55:00 PM
remarkable word choice allowing your pen to spill beautifully, rich... what a delight!.. huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 3:13:00 PM
Hugs back Nette, your visits are always appreciated.
Date: 6/13/2014 12:55:00 AM
I love word play, and great strength and magic can be summoned with their appropriate presence. Praise for you on this one.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 7:26:00 AM
Thanks so much Mark.
Date: 6/12/2014 10:22:00 PM
Aren't you simply amazing! !!! Love your poetry. ... Missed your visits. My turn to say that. Hope all is well. This was a great play on words.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 7:30:00 AM
Hi Eileen, I was on the tennis court giving lessons at 7 am and the rest of the day just flew bye. Thanks for your concern but all is indeed well. I like the avatar it makes me think of Andy Warhol's artwork.
Date: 6/12/2014 8:06:00 AM
"Articulations born to be" fantastic line, as is the rest of the poem. Sometimes I feel a little like that porpoise.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:21:00 AM
Stay away from those boats.
Date: 6/11/2014 4:50:00 PM
Very cool puns, Richard. Word play can be a challenge, but you've certainly risen to it in a great way here. Sometimes I feel like a "Dazed Porpoise" when I try to write complex poetry like this. Well done! Wishing you success in the contest.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:23:00 AM
Thanks for your thoughtful visit Carolyn.
Date: 6/11/2014 3:54:00 PM
"I try rising to the surface with my cursive. Yet, I wander from purpose"...sharp, sharp emotions. Miss your words, sir.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:20:00 AM
Drop by any time my friend.
Date: 6/10/2014 12:44:00 PM
lovely write as ever Richard you inspire me to try new forms. Hugs Jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2014 7:17:00 AM
Thanks Jan, I enjoy the challange. Hugs back.
Date: 6/10/2014 10:46:00 AM
I actually love the message here,,if for a contest good luck
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2014 7:15:00 AM
Thanks for the luck Harry.
Date: 6/10/2014 10:07:00 AM
Well done Richard... I might have to give it a whirl
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2014 7:15:00 AM
I had fun writing this one Tim. Thanks for being the first to comment.

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