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Fate's Footfalls

Bony knuckles raking gloomy halls Chambers echoing fate’s footfalls Slumping shoulders and deathly grins Recounting on fingers, countless sins Shuddering, shivering in godless fears Admonishing my guilt, the end, it nears Cowering in silence, holding my breath Smelling foul odors of impending death Grasping and groveling a final chance Embracing, mating, in fatal romance Facing my fears in a sorrowful stare Fingertips gracing my tendrils of hair Ghastly screams erupt pouting lip Into the darkness my soul does slip

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Line Gauthier

Date: 3/26/2018 10:26:00 PM

A powerful write, Rhoda. Congrats on your win. Well done.

Pat Adams

Date: 3/25/2018 9:17:00 AM

sorrowful stare, tendrils of hair! Amazing write! You continue to impress!..80)

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/26/2018 3:27:00 PM

Thank you, Pat. I appreciate your time and kindness.

John Lawless

Date: 3/21/2018 8:19:00 AM

Rhoda, reading this was like rolling down a hill......gaining speed and momentum with each line, each thought ....leaving the reader(at least this one) breathlessly reflecting on Fate's Footfalls. Thanks for participating in the contest.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/21/2018 10:31:00 PM

Thank you, John, for hosting and for my placement. It was fun to write for this wonderful contest.

John Gondolf

Date: 3/21/2018 7:56:00 AM

Back to say congrats on your placement. John

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/21/2018 10:33:00 PM

Thank you, John. Congratulations on yours as well.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/21/2018 3:38:00 AM

Scary. I hope that the soul does not slip up forever...

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/21/2018 4:43:00 AM

Thank you, Dear. Nah...forever is too long. Thanks for stopping by. Appreciate the visit.

Akkina Downing

Date: 3/18/2018 9:59:00 PM

Oh my gosh, Rhoda, I'm not sure I can forget this one now. Dramatically the best! Best wishes although it's a win for me... Hugs :)

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/20/2018 8:00:00 PM

Thank you so much, Akkina, for your support. You are a kindhearted soul.

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/18/2018 8:12:00 PM

Such a dark and captivating write, Rhonda. I love the dramatic feeling of Death closing in and the gripping imagery that scares my senses.. a chilling rhythm moved me through your eerie poetic lines like 'a dance in the pale moonlight' - such awesome flow.. Superb poetry my friend! Warmest wishes and keep the nightlight on.. ~Susan

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/20/2018 8:00:00 PM

Thank you so much, Susan. It was not my normal type of poetry, but it was fun to step outside the box. Glad you enjoyed it as much as I did writing. Thanks for your support.

Arturo Michael

Date: 3/18/2018 4:53:00 PM

Not a bad way to go...verses lying in a hospital bed in the snow...Nice imagery...building up before breaking through death's door...All the best Rhoda

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/18/2018 5:23:00 PM

There's some truth there...Thank you for your kind comments and encouragement, Arturo. You are appreciated.

James Swartz

Date: 3/18/2018 10:51:00 AM

Awesome! This is a great write Rhoda! Perfect in every way possible. Now. How's the book coming along, I've been patiently waiting you know.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/18/2018 3:56:00 PM

Hi James! Thank you so much, Dear. I've been busy reorganizing my space to have a quiet desk area. Just can't seem to tune out distractions. Typical me...but it is coming along...and I WILL publish in 2019. I have a new FB page as well, Rhoda Tripp Writes.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/16/2018 10:19:00 AM

Well, I was just blown away! Gripping and so crisply delivered, not to mention deeply scooped. I know the hair reference is true, but feel sure the rest is pure talent plus imagination as spurred by a palette of insightful emotions you know well enough to grow dark / dramatic / profound. I have to recover from the impact of this one - and that's a good thing. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/16/2018 5:56:00 PM

Awww. CayCay. I so look forward to your endearing comments and your well thought proverbs. You are so adorable. Hugs.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/15/2018 8:34:00 PM

Chilling--and so well-written, Rhoda! Janice

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/16/2018 4:38:00 AM

Thank you, Janice for your support.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/15/2018 6:09:00 PM

What is wrong with me? I need to fave this!!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/15/2018 6:35:00 PM

Lol. Thank you, Andrea!

John Bertin

Date: 3/15/2018 2:53:00 PM

Eeee! Like the ending of a Poe tale.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/15/2018 4:43:00 PM

Hi, John. Thanks for reading. I used to watch Alfred Hitchcock late at night when I was a kid. Can you tell? Lol

John Gondolf

Date: 3/14/2018 6:27:00 PM

Wow, Rhoda, this one gave me chills. Counting countless sins on my fingers and admonishing my guilt...I need to get my act together. This write is a winner with me. John

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/14/2018 7:39:00 PM

John...if it gave you chills, we are in this together because it gave me chills writing it, Lol. Thank you for your kindness and continued support.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/14/2018 12:46:00 AM

wow, Rhoda. I wish I had done this one . It's one of the best in the contest!!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/14/2018 4:01:00 PM

Awww...garsh, Andrea. You made my day. Thank you Sweetie.

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/13/2018 5:06:00 PM

Oh, so dark, Rhoda! I felt death's presence in your words. Yes, we all must face that fate! Well done, and best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/14/2018 4:00:00 PM

Sandra, My Dear, you are such a kindheart that you will never face this fate. You'll have angels come take you away. I, however....lol. Thanks for stopping in, Dear.

Craig Cornish

Date: 3/13/2018 12:47:00 PM

Loving it Rhoda--it grows from the start (and you must revisit at Halloween!

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/14/2018 3:58:00 PM

Lol...Craig. Thank you, Sweetie. If you'd like, I'll write a new one at Halloween time for you...if I remember...ha!

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/13/2018 2:00:00 AM

Woooo, deeply darkly, Rhoda. A fine piece, and suitably doom laden. I like to think that when my time comes, the grim reaper will come with a whoopee cushion and a flower that squirts water, just to liven things up. Viv x

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/13/2018 4:26:00 AM

Thank you, Viv. This write is purely fiction and I was thinking of a "friend" and her fate. Lol. We all know that Adonis on a white steed will be coming for me. ;-)

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 3/12/2018 9:32:00 PM

A hauntingly compelling write Rhoda; can imagine hearing the stalking creaky bone sounds of deaths footfalls! Good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 3/13/2018 4:24:00 AM

Thank you so much, Che. You are appreciated.