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False Pride

I have fallen in deep with pride tonight My good intention used against me I’m beguiled by ego’s pompous might Dismissed was true grace; now I see When clouded judgment led me onto The reefs below and turbulent sea ‘Take a moment... maybe turn and run! From false pride, you must disengage Heed your conscience or come undone Hear my words, do not become enraged Endless is haunting of conscience, near dead In this I implore you, with me, engage!' What you choose this night determines tomorrow.. Turn about my friend; turn away from sorrow'. ~*~ 7/18/13 For Craig's "Terza Rima Sonnet Contest" (My first attempt at this and I'm afraid it's far from perfect) Thanks to the friends who gave me much needed help...still revising.

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Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 9/3/2013 3:27:00 AM

A really powerful write my friend. Well done.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/22/2013 7:08:00 AM

You have done a wonderful job. You should be proud of this fine poem. It would not be false pride.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/22/2013 2:57:00 AM

Good for you, Annalise...The message of this write is so powerful. Wonderful advice. :) I haven't attempted one of these either....I hope I can get something going soon. Thanks for your visit to my work. Your comment is most appreciated. Hugs

Jack Horne

Date: 7/20/2013 10:10:00 AM

lovely write, my friend, and such a strong message here

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 7/19/2013 8:53:00 PM

This is a great poem and I think it will do very good in the contest.... Lucilla

Joseph May

Date: 7/18/2013 11:58:00 AM

great write Annalise....best wishes

Jack Ellison

Date: 7/18/2013 9:50:00 AM

DO NOT APOLOGIZE my dear sweet Annalise... this was a great write! "What you choose this night determines tomorrow"... great thought! Love ya! Great big huggs, Jack xoxoxox

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/18/2013 9:47:00 AM

Damn right! Fair play. Fantastic lines!

Toquyen Harrell

Date: 7/18/2013 7:28:00 AM

Great one, Annalise! We all have to be careful with that. You did a great job :). Good luck in the contest.

Nikola Žilic

Date: 7/18/2013 7:06:00 AM

powerful, thoughtful, very good write.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 7/18/2013 5:50:00 AM

'Turn about my friend; turn away from the sorrow'...WOW, perfect ending line for this little gem Annalise and with your first attempt at this form you knocked it out of the park! - Tim