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Falling so hard for you beat will not wane dark blue nights dreary cold ran down your street to see if you were home tapped on your pane come feel my soft touch dance on bare feet! Written - August 19th, 2015 Nette Onclaud's contest - "Visual of a Verso" (We were asked to categorize our poems as rhyme, but mine is also a personification... of the rain.)

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James Inman

Date: 8/26/2016 12:59:00 PM

Kelly, I loved the personification. Also a beautiful metaphor for love.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/10/2016 8:39:00 PM

Thank you for reading, James. I appreciate your kind comments :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/26/2016 8:06:00 AM

A 7 for your winning poem, Kelly! Janice

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/10/2016 8:19:00 PM

Thanks for reading, Janice. I appreciate the 7 rating :)

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/26/2016 6:18:00 AM

Hi Kelly. Congrats for your placement with this deep piece!! ;-)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/8/2016 7:31:00 PM

Hi Teddy, thank you for reading and commenting so kindly :)

Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/23/2016 4:37:00 PM

Hi Kelly.... another love, another task, is an impossible fate.... you soul's territory, your heart's courage is great...Kudos

Kelly Deschler
Date: 3/13/2016 6:12:00 PM

Hi, and thank you for the lovely comments. I appreciate it very much :)

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 1/30/2016 9:55:00 PM

Short, clipped phrases most effectively expressed... there's nothing quite like dancing in bare feet! BRAVO Kelly! Best wishes, Keith

Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/7/2016 8:31:00 PM

Dancing in the rain is such a wonderful feeling... Thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate them very much, Keith.

Funom Makama

Date: 12/17/2015 4:11:00 AM

lines with curves of wisdom and landscapes of awe! My mind is in a park of joy to how I manage selecting this page. Keep on writing dear poet and as always, a wonderful 7 without a doubt!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/13/2016 7:40:00 PM

Thank you for your encouraging words and lovely comments, as always :)

Julia Ward

Date: 9/6/2015 12:58:00 AM

A pretty poem enjoyed today. Julia, xx

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/12/2015 8:13:00 PM

Thank you for reading, Julia. I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

Skat A

Date: 9/1/2015 11:43:00 PM

amazing win... SKAT

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/9/2015 8:25:00 PM

Thank you for reading, Skat :)

Paul Callus

Date: 8/31/2015 11:52:00 AM

Back with deserved congratulations, Kelly! I had no doubt this would be a top winner:) All the best. // paul

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/7/2015 11:49:00 PM

Thank you for coming by once again, Paul. I appreciate it so much!... I was not so sure how well this poem would do, but I was pleased to place 3rd :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/30/2015 10:34:00 PM

Very wonderful verse Kelly! Congrats on awesome win!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/5/2015 11:23:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Dr. Upma :)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/30/2015 6:10:00 AM

beautiful rhyme and personification I love the way you crafted this Kelly - congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/4/2015 11:36:00 PM

Your kindness is always appreciated, Jan. Thank you so much :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2015 10:19:00 PM

Again, I loved yours, and Congrats for the win, Kelly.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/3/2015 8:37:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea. So happy you liked my interpretation of the theme!

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/27/2015 2:36:00 AM

There is a wondeful feeling of youth and discovery of ageless desire in this poem. The style, and spirit in which you composed this write really puts my mind in motion, a strong and exciting feeling of fun with visions of nightime adventure Kelly...J.A.B. A FAV!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/2/2015 2:00:00 PM

Your poetry brings a lot of inspiration to me, so it feels amazing to have inspired you, Justin... Thank you so much for faving this one :)

Daver Austin

Date: 8/26/2015 11:09:00 AM

This is so love-crazy it is bound to capture a reader's fancy. Love, daver

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/1/2015 9:08:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly, Daver :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/22/2015 2:30:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Way to go with this one that reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..I appreciate you stopping by and taking time to comment..Sara

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/30/2015 2:47:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sara. It's always a pleasure to read your work :)

Paul Callus

Date: 8/22/2015 3:37:00 AM

Indeed personification it is, Kelly! Clever and creative romantic mood. In my eyes already a winner and a fav! Hugs // paul

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/30/2015 2:07:00 PM

Thank you for your supportive comments and for making this poem a fav! It really means a lot to me, Paul.... hugs :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/21/2015 4:02:00 PM

I SEE it is personification and I love it, Kelly. Yours is very inventive. Wonderful!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/30/2015 2:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. It means a lot, Andrea :)

Eric Boddie

Date: 8/20/2015 11:21:00 AM

what a tempting invite....images of pure delight....so simple yet so profound....that's just Love, we all know that sound....;)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/26/2015 9:29:00 PM

I really appreciate your lovely comments, Eric. Thank you for reading :)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/20/2015 9:00:00 AM

Woah unique and artsy with ethereal romantic moods. Thumbs up! Great to read frm yer pen again. Sensational actually.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/26/2015 9:19:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. I appreciate it very much :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 8/20/2015 7:00:00 AM

Excellent. Enjoyed reading this poem. All the best for the contest. Thanks for sharing it.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/26/2015 8:47:00 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Ravi... I appreciate your nice comments. Thank you :)

Honestly J.T.

Date: 8/19/2015 2:47:00 AM

Wow, I truly enjoyed reading this poem. I pictured exactly what you've written. Good job -JT

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/26/2015 8:15:00 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed it, JT. Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly :)