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Fall

Hot sun-kissed days--- fled and rolled far away. . . . Crisp coolness saturates air Brink to life and decay? Pumpkins so yellow; melons so mellow Gnomes appear; fat harvest fills Crown AUTUMN: queen of year! Dancing wind ~ jazzy blows, leaves on branches. . . . Rainbow shower foliage Trumpet dazzle of death? (c)Olive Eloisa 7:14pm June 17, 2014 CONTEST NAME: 1 in 4: Choose your Season, Choose Your Form SPONSOR: ANDREA DIETRICH placed 6th .. :D ** made little change to my third line after judging to correct the wrong syllable count.. :D!

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James Fraser

Date: 12/9/2014 1:03:00 PM

The Fall is my favourite season Olive, and you've portrayed it wonderfully through your words, James :)

Donna Jones

Date: 6/30/2014 5:48:00 PM

Outstanding....congratulations.. :-)

Jan Allison

Date: 6/29/2014 4:55:00 PM

congratulations on your win for this fine poem. hugs jan xxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:55:00 PM

Thank you Jan.. :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/29/2014 4:02:00 PM

what an upbeat entry; i like, eloi.. cheers to you on your fine win.. hugggs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:49:00 PM

thanks Nette. :)

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/29/2014 11:23:00 AM

Hi Olive, this is such a beautifully descriptive write! Huge congratulations to you on your great win! Warmest regards.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:44:00 PM

HUGE CONGRATULATIONS TOO Pandita.. :D thanks much. :D

Arlene Smith

Date: 6/29/2014 9:34:00 AM

congrats on a great win, Olive... I love the original imagery here.. Hugs.. Arlene

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:41:00 PM

thank you Arlene.. :D

Elaine George

Date: 6/29/2014 6:21:00 AM

Beautiful kimo, Olive. Many congrats on your win. Elaine

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:05:00 PM

Thank you Elaine..:) GBU

Paul Callus

Date: 6/29/2014 4:44:00 AM

Congratulations!! Olive_eloi :)) cake and tea for you:)) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:05:00 PM

Thank you..:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 6:04:00 PM

Thanks I love the cakes and tea..:)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2014 11:01:00 PM

Olive, this is a very exciting one for the fall! Great formatting of the lines with bold print here and there. One little thing, your third line was one syllable over the count. nonetheless, an awesome poem. Congrats for your win.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/29/2014 2:57:00 AM

Oh Andrea :O good you still placed me despite that.. :O?!!! thanks much .. :D! God bless you.. :) yes must be 6 syllables.. :O

Justin Bordner

Date: 6/20/2014 8:37:00 PM

Very wild spirit in this charming poem. Where I live Autumn is a sacred season, with mystery and mirth for all whom prepare for the lovely pain of Winter." Trumpet dazzle of death..." this is serious good poetry, produces fantastic image, feeling and meaning Olive.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 6/21/2014 4:25:00 AM

hahaha.. :) lil wild only :D yes that what I want readers feel in this write.. :D mytery and mirth.. :)