Faith

belief arrives at the beginning... not at the end

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Charles Henderson

Date: 12/21/2010 8:04:00 PM

A good way to end my evening by reading this warm and comfortable Senryu. So true in its premise. Charles

Deb Radke

Date: 12/21/2010 6:46:00 PM

I agree, they are good people, with good advice. I am a novice at this, and not well-versed, so to speak, in forms of poetry. I don't know what it would have been in its former state, but I believe it is now a senryu. If not, I hope someone reading will let me know. It seems to read better, rhythmically, so perhaps that is good. And I think it has still kept its original message. Thank you everyone. And Nigel, I have just read some of your work -- amazing. I will read more.

Nigel Fox

Date: 12/21/2010 1:31:00 PM

Deb, very good , but there are lots of poetry police about !To some it's not what you say but how you say it !But they're quite a nice not really ! Ha Ha . Best of luck to you !

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/21/2010 11:38:00 AM

Will you please give once over to the form of Senryu, Deb

Deb Radke

Date: 12/21/2010 5:19:00 AM

Yes. You are right. It reads much better this way. Thank you, as always, for your advice. I appreciate you reading my work as well.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/21/2010 12:30:00 AM

Very profound statement, Deb! You have defined faith so well here. It is the beginning of our passageway to eternal life. Love, Carolyn