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Fading Love

dark red roses fade- our love withers ---------------------------------- Contest: One Broken Monoku Sponsor: Rick Parise

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Susan Ashley

Date: 2/9/2018 4:57:00 PM

A moving monoku of heartbreak Paul. Your imagery is full of beautiful sadness. You always excel my friend. My warmest wishes .. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 2/9/2018 5:17:00 PM

Thank you dear Susan. I had forgotten this one-liner, glad you brought me back to it! ~ Have a lovely weekend. Warm wishes // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/5/2014 1:54:00 PM

Paul, this is genius! I am still trying to grasp this form and yours is an excellent example! Warmest regards, Pandita.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/6/2014 4:12:00 PM

Wow! Pandita your precious feedback has brought my wings back to life again!:) Thank you...you rock! hugs // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/5/2014 11:24:00 AM

love the imagery here Paul..

Paul Callus
Date: 12/6/2014 4:13:00 PM

Thank you for the 'like', Harry. Welcome back! // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 12/3/2014 6:58:00 PM

Hi Paul, very nice imagery here of the roses and love and their fading and withering! Good luck in the contest! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2014 10:15:00 AM

Thank you Sandra. Next time I'll write about blooming roses and love!:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/3/2014 3:59:00 PM

NIcely done, Paul. Love and roses are good metaphors for each other.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2014 4:55:00 PM

Yes, they are Andrea, but I must also confess that their use has been squeezed to the very last drop! // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/2/2014 4:20:00 PM

good contest entry, keep writing.. maybe you can give me one for the new contestLight & Love?

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 4:51:00 PM

Thank you Debbie. I was working on a poem for your latest contest (I chose the cannabis theme) but still have not finished it due to too many commitments; will go have a look at the new one. Love & Peace // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/2/2014 11:20:00 AM

They always die too fast, Paul. A beautiful, heartfelt monoku! Wishing you success in Rick's contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 12:22:00 PM

Hi Carolyn! I have been off air since yesterday...busy me! Am trying to catch up with mail. Thank you for the lovely comments. Hope you are keeping well. Will be back to you:) hugs // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 12/2/2014 7:53:00 AM

Hi Paul, its a heart-broken monoku. Love. take care. God bless. Good luck in contestXXX rajat

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 12:47:00 PM

You got it right, Rajat! Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 12/2/2014 2:05:00 AM

oh i love roses, even when it withers :)) excellent monoku, Paul! visual & evocative!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 12:44:00 PM

Lovely comments, Hija! Much appreciated; I'll send you a virtual rose:) (without thorns!) // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/1/2014 8:36:00 PM

So much to consider in this write. The Rose as the eternal symbol of love. Love threaded back in to the condition of the flower. The dark. The red. In these small writes I like to consider everyword. Let the words take me on a journey. Well done Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2014 12:41:00 PM

Thank you for delving into the heart of my Monoku, Maurice; feedback such as yours is very welcome. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 2:42:00 AM

Beautiful in its sadness, poetic in its metaphor. Sometimes going back to basics, and refraining from the overly complex, is what hits the nail on the head, over and over for the reader.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/1/2014 11:05:00 AM

Thank you Timothy...I enjoy reading your comments; you would make a good English literature teacher. Refraining from the overly complex is benefitting both to the author and the reader. cheers. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 11/30/2014 10:18:00 PM

like a rose the love withers, ahh.. Blessings dear friend and good luck in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 12/1/2014 11:17:00 AM

Thank you Eve; may you have a lovely week ahead of you! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/29/2014 10:16:00 PM

aha./ a sad one Paul.. :) i hope to get my thoughts with these short verse.. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2014 3:51:00 AM

Yes, it is sad, but sadness often helps to write poetry with feeling! Have a happy Sunday!:) hugs // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 11/29/2014 2:07:00 PM

oh, so sad! nice one, paul...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2014 4:53:00 PM

Sad and nice often go hand in hand, Ilene; that's how life is! Thanks for stopping by; have a nice weekend. // paul

David Meade

Date: 11/29/2014 10:51:00 AM

soon only memories remain . . . how precious they are . . . you connected the broken Monoku with the silk thread of memory . . . nicely done my good friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2014 4:49:00 PM

You have a remarkable ability to read well into things my friend...and your comments are always refreshing! Thank you. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 11/29/2014 8:13:00 AM

Best wishes for contest! It's sure to fly high!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2014 4:52:00 PM

Thank you Upma. Dying love is tragic; could be our fault...or maybe not; perhaps something could have been done before to avoid it. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 11/29/2014 8:12:00 AM

This is sad n beautiful Paul! Withering of love is so tragic, trust these red roses never fade!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/29/2014 5:56:00 AM

- So sad ..... but beautiful, Paul - Luck in contest - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2014 4:55:00 PM

Many thanks Anne Lise; love is a fragile gift that needs handling with utmost care! Have a nice Sunday! /x/ paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/28/2014 11:08:00 PM

That is sad...indeed. Paul...You have such a way with words. I'm always enchanted.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2014 9:32:00 AM

Thank you Eileen!! Little do you know how much these comments mean to me; like you I too have my low moments when I lose trust in my abilities! Have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul