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The roar in his ears was fading now, Not much longer the sergeant said. The stink of cordite was fading now, As he looked around at all the dead. The shroud of smoke was fading now, The gunfire that caused him to fear. Machine gun chatter was fading now, As the advancing enemy drew near. All went quiet as they passed him by, His thoughts were fading now. He lay there wondering what to do His mind was fading now. He stood once more in that hell. Looking at himself amid red snow, All has faded for him now. © Dave Timperley 24/10/2019

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Date: 10/31/2019 2:38:00 AM
Awesome imagery, of how it is, straight and to the point, love the truth here.
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Dave Timperley
Date: 10/31/2019 7:58:00 AM
Thank you Harry, always good to get a compliment from you Sir. God Bless. D.
Date: 10/24/2019 12:26:00 PM
Your suggestive, expressive imagery strikes home, Dave. Flashes pertaining to somebody who was there and experienced it all...right till the very end. Regards // paul
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Dave Timperley
Date: 10/24/2019 12:35:00 PM
Thank you Paul, my mind turns to Remembrance more at this time of year. God Bless. D.
Date: 10/24/2019 10:40:00 AM
Wow, what a powerful poem, so well written Dave!! Well done :)
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Dave Timperley
Date: 10/24/2019 11:17:00 AM
Thank you Heidi, always nice to hear from you. God Bless. D.

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