Exquisite Komorebi

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Written: October 30, 2023, ______________________________________ When the sunlight rays dawning to decay Within the scenic shade of the tall trees, Foster felicity flows forth and fray, Dappling the vista with a subtle breeze Casting twirling shades in the woodland floor. Vintage music stirs up forlorn desire, A ceaseless mixture of light and leaves tore Pith pearl persuasive pontoon painted pyre Consume the elixir of leaves and beams Light and bush rattles pulchrify the earth Soak in the luscious komorebi gleams, Ineffable grace, a trice of high worth Light and leaves exudate a calm aura Time seems to pose in gossamer flora... 1st place contest winner

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/14/2024 7:15:00 PM

Dear Lasaad, your vibrant imagery and metaphors are beautiful. I especially admire "Consume the elixir of leaves and beams" - so poetically alive and lovely! Congratulations for your exquisite poem being showcased in Silent One's contest. It's a pleasure to share the podium with you, my esteemed friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/4/2024 7:40:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this wonderful write/lovely picture. Glad Silent One did this. Have a wonderful day writing away........................

Silent One

Date: 1/3/2024 12:07:00 PM

An excellent sonnet dear Sotto, which flows and rhymes so well.. This wasn't really a contest, but an opportunity to showcase an Na poem..

Jay Narain

Date: 10/31/2023 11:10:00 AM

Wonderful poem. You mix alliteration and rhyme perfectly. GL in contest.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/31/2023 5:07:00 AM

a lovely sonnet, dearest Sotto, with a flowing rhyme scheme. The alliterations were beautifully subtle. I liked 'vintage music stirs up forlorn desire'--reminds me of my mom who always played classical music on her piano when she was forlorn.' The last two lines were beautiful, a perfect summation. I also like how you described time--gossamer flora. That was exquisite. Beautifully done. Best wishes, dearest Sotto, for the contest. Have a splendid Tuesday, Sara

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 10/31/2023 2:43:00 AM

Wonderful poem. You mix alliteration and rhyme perfectly. A great poem, best for a win. Blessings.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/30/2023 10:55:00 PM

I love this word, its beautiful and how beautifully you’ve interpreted it and written for it. A sonnet with alliterations and the flow of rhymes and diction is beyond impeccable! I love the way you’ve also painted imagery and how those opening lines are so captivating! Especially” Foster felicity flows forth and fly,“ exquisite wordplay really! “ Consume the elixir of leaves and beams“ Soul warming! And absolute pleasure always reading your poems, they are so artistic and thought provoking! BOL