Exertion Epiphany

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Written: January 19, 2024 ____________________________________ Wondrous cymbals in choral harmony enraged scarlet wing beats in a fierce rhapsody! Countless moments strung together. Echoes pelt, of unfulfilled desires a minute hand race without a tether horizon turns a fuchsia shade as mauve streaks paint a show purple dreams catch fire and glow. Swirling seraphic sways while you glide on ethereal waves euphoric whirls of azulene loops euphuistic? Fantasies swirl in the velvet eyes As the sliver of the moon alights The blushing sunset rekindles yearnings Zephyr is honeyed by the lavender petals Fragrant allegories smote my essence A velvet cloak of dreams dances across my skin My heart's sleeves pirouette in bliss Words of love Braille-alike soft kisses Tender promises mingle sweet breaths Gives a heady rush akin to mulled vinegar. A chilling pulse, a numb sigh where does the boundary lie? between life and death? shattered verbal tidbits may spiral beyond sight; speaking is perilous from feeble fingers and wild gazes assuming I am silent with a talent quadrant, a quail in the bush, diction falling mushy notice my words I taught them to rhyme still not worth your time hearts were forsaken by a haze of ideas I believe I'll speak to stones.

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Howard Kerr

Date: 2/7/2024 11:59:00 PM

Dear Sotto, this tantalising mellifluous medley of unique concepts is beyond superb. Your discriminating use of colour, exotic cadence, and profundity ensures its permanence in literary circles. “Zephyr is honeyed by the lavender petals,” “My heart's sleeves pirouette in bliss,” “euphoric whirls of azulene loops euphuistic?” are among my personal favourites Impeccable Howard

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/20/2024 9:49:00 AM

dearest Sotto--a thought-provoking, philosophical, and visually evocative poem. This poem was a sensory experience because of the eloquent and descriptive imagery (Fragrant allegories smote my essence A velvet cloak of dreams dances across my skin) So much I enjoyed about your poem, but I especially liked: "where does the boundary lie? between life and death?" I'll continue to ponder those words throughout my day. Your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/20/2024 7:18:00 AM

--Fantasies swirl in the velvet eyes As the sliver of the moon alights The blushing sunset rekindles yearnings Zephyr is honeyed by the lavender petals--WOW! fabulous writing, my friend. Much enjoyed the voice of your poem.

Silent One

Date: 1/20/2024 5:10:00 AM

Dear Sotto.. Your poem is a symphony of sensations, a dance of colours and emotions that captivates the reader from start to finish. The opening lines set the stage with 'Wondrous cymbals' and 'enraged scarlet wing beats,' immediately drawing us into a world of vibrant intensity. The imagery of the horizon turning a fuchsia shade, mauve streaks painting a show, and purple dreams catching fire creates a vivid dreamscape that is both surreal and enchanting...

Ink Empress

Date: 1/19/2024 11:57:00 PM

Ah dr sotto another one of those poems that truly left me in awe captivated by the beauty of your word weaving and imagery painted with perfumed diction that evokes senses of readers and touches the soul of the reader just effortlessly! From all the lines in this i especially loved the ending the most where youv mentioned “ where does the boundary lie? between life and death? shattered verbal tidbits may spiral beyond sight;“ what a philosophical thought that depicts wisdom and truth! Profound!