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Evergreen

I would have settled for a smirk, for a quirk of smug lips and that trademark dimple that still makes me crazy. I would have been happy with a transient glint in those forget-me-not eyes, a momentary hint of what I felt... and still feel. I miss the endless routine of midnight pep talks and morning road blocks, of stolen glances and skillful dances around this knot of nerves. Now there's just a gaping hole where the lava once pooled before it blistered and cooled. And I keep picking the scab. I want to put you in an album and keep you on a shelf to collect fairy dust and never-land must. I want to forget, but have the means to remember. Instead, I have scenes from last November dangling from my seasoned mind with drops of dew in my evergreen eyes. For Tracie's "Homage" contest *This poem was inspired by one of my favourite poems here on the Soup: "Almost" by Drake Eszes. Here is a passage I especially love: "I was almost in the clear Setting free her unchained melody Didn’t see a forthcoming pain Saturday nights, no longer the same My mornings are still of you A drop of dew Dangling from emerald green edges"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 2/1/2014 8:25:00 PM
Absolutely fabulous. Your command of language and internal rhyme if excellent. A talented and inspired write.
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Date: 8/25/2013 5:15:00 AM
*sigh* beautifully put as ever, as its not autumn yet time will only tell if my eyes are evergreen too..hoping for autumn hues to set me free..loved this x
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Date: 8/17/2013 8:06:00 PM
Heather, , a wonderful Homage to this poet.. congrats. SKAT
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Date: 8/17/2013 5:52:00 PM
Enjoyed this heather congrats Shadow x smiles
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Date: 8/17/2013 11:16:00 AM
well, goodness, how cool is THIS that the poet I borrowed an idea from is also on the top three winner list. BIG congrats to you, Heather.
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Date: 8/17/2013 11:06:00 AM
Congrad's on your win! You did a great job. Light & Love
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Date: 8/17/2013 7:31:00 AM
Beautiful. The last stanza is absolutely perfect.
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Date: 8/17/2013 7:12:00 AM
Really enjoyed reading again, congratulations Heather.
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Date: 7/24/2013 4:30:00 PM
So beatiful, Heather. Drake must be well pleased with this complimentary write. I'm awed by your smooth writing, as ever. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Licia :-)
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Date: 7/23/2013 5:20:00 PM
Well, all I can say is in order to create just one stanza of this beautiful creation it would take every bit of talent I could muster... Great work... I feel smarter just having read it... Love ya even more now....Jake
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Date: 7/23/2013 12:19:00 AM
wow, Heather, this is amazing. And the way you got inspired off Drake. I don't even remember about this Homage contest. I will have to check it out. btw, what you asked me about free verse. MIne seems more like prose to me than free verse. I just don't quite have exactly the flair of this one when I write most of my free verse. It comes off seeming more narrative than free verse. if that makes any sense. A FAVE on this one.
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Date: 7/22/2013 11:39:00 PM
Excellent. Lovely foot note. Enjoyed. Tfs
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Date: 7/22/2013 9:52:00 AM
Good luck with this poem. It appears impressive.
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Date: 7/22/2013 9:40:00 AM
What a compliment to Drake, and a poem so wonderful it stands on its own!! Great poem, Heather! ps.....and many thanks for the placement you gave my own in your funny contest! I'm honored!!
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Date: 7/22/2013 6:53:00 AM
Amazing piece and a excellent foot note. You have a way with words, this is so romantic. 7 all the way!
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Date: 7/21/2013 6:22:00 PM
Much thanks for the recent contest theme. I had heard of footles from other soupers, but never got around to trying them. Your contest spurred me on to actually writing them, and I discovered how fun they can be. Also for the wonderful comment. I can never think of anything half so good to say regarding your poems. Never was a very good commentator I don't think.
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Date: 7/21/2013 2:10:00 PM
a stream-of- consciousness kind of appeal, this one... really easy and yet deep in its expression of what missing is all about.. i like!.. thanks for having mercy on my footle doodle (lol) , heather.... glad to have been part of your challenge..:) huggs
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Date: 7/21/2013 11:22:00 AM
This is a beautiful and exceptional piece, Heather....Evergreen eyes that always see the best and the purest of love's encounter with the heart. Drake is something else, isn't he? I'm glad he inspired you to write such a beautiful piece. Hugs! :)
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Date: 7/21/2013 9:18:00 AM
Here I was, super excited to see something new from you. Then I see your notes on the bottom. My morning started slightly rough, but this just made up for EVERYTHING. It was the 1st poem I read this morning too! I have much to say on this. But, for now, there is something mystical about November. Changing of seasons, of hearts. This hit hard for me. The inspiration made me smile grand. Thank you so much, Heather.
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