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Eternally Waiting

She told me never to send her flowers For they are pesky things just waiting to die I told her never to ask me how she looked In some certain dress for I dare not tell a lie So we both just sat there thinking That this life held no further surprise But then came next morning, lying in our bed, We became a feast for the flies! Those endearments we prescribe To our most cherished ones Can never hope to describe Just how much they resemble the lovely sun But if you wait for the perfect moment To speak up load and clear You'll be waiting evermore On a two way street, built of fear!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 9/26/2018 1:09:00 PM
Very deep thoughts, Timothy, but a bouquet of flowers i know it doesn't last but they are a comfort of life that puts a sweet scent in the air if you are not allergic too.. enjoyed reading.. It was nice to see my cousin Lucy comment ; it brought all the great moments I enjoyed with her. Oh,,, and she was an immaculate person everything had its place.
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Date: 3/21/2013 7:56:00 AM
This is a very good poem eventhough I don't like flies. they give me a spooky feeling. In 2010 I had a bad expirence with files that appeared out of nowhere and no matter what I did - they would not go away. They lasted 7 days. I keep my house very clean. Lucilla
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/21/2013 9:12:00 AM
7 days? Sounds like a nightmare! However I do admit the only insect the really make me nervous are bees. I don't know why I hate them so much (their stings don't even hurt that bad) but I can't stand being in the same room with them.
Date: 3/19/2013 4:12:00 PM
wow, wow... imagine that, a couple who agree on compromising what makes our relationships nice and flowing. I have had these flies on me,,,lol.....the good thing is when the love up and left... so did i...why stick around the boring emotionless walls.... enjoyed...LINDA
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/19/2013 4:36:00 PM
I'm not sure how true this stay to the Grook form, but it felt right at the time. Compromise is key and so is a sense of adventure and newness. Thanks again :)
Date: 3/18/2013 10:36:00 PM
: ) Reading this Tim, you know... sometimes with us women, you just can't win! LOL Totally enjoyed! Annalise
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/18/2013 11:53:00 PM
Haha... didn't think this would inspire that kinda comment, but I laughed reading it.
Date: 3/18/2013 9:01:00 PM
Cleverly written...this verse was so exciting! I really like your style in this one particularly. Looks like I found another brilliant poet! Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/18/2013 9:05:00 PM
Thanks once again Laura! I am so humbled to have gained some fans on the Soup :)
Date: 3/18/2013 2:18:00 PM
gosh, how horrible. It sounds like you both woke up having been murdered in your sleep with that feast for flies line!! anyway, I get the message and it's a great one.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/18/2013 8:46:00 PM
Reading that over again I guess that does imply murder... but I was meaning they just died of natural causes. Either way the message would still be the same... glad you liked!

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