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Escaping Gravity

Please don't distort me with expectations! I felt your orbit many years ago. Your gravity filled me with temptations. The moon in my sky, you made my heart slow. My ocean was drawn towards your bright light. I felt your orbit many years ago! Still I remember how you lit my night. Sadly for me I became lost in you. My ocean was drawn towards your bright light. Losing myself I didn't know what to do! You in the distance up there in my sky. Sadly for me, I became lost in you. A bright light no warmth, I asked myself "Why?". why, was I so attracted to your blue! You in the distance up there in my sky. The love I felt in the end wasn't true. Why was I so attracted to your blue? Your gravity filled me with temptations. Please don't distort me with expectations! For Shadow's contest March 18th, 2015.

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Paul Callus

Date: 6/26/2015 7:20:00 AM

A Terzanelle executed with a masterly pen; the content makes us ponder. Isn't life filled with 'whys' and 'ifs'! Congratulations on a most worthy entry and win, Richard; (mine floundered!:) All the best. // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2015 7:29:00 AM

Thanks Paul, even when not successful in contests (which has been many times.) I am happy a poem is born out of the effort.

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/24/2015 8:32:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your fine win, Rick! Found out that my first comment isn't here. Sorry, in my hurry I musn't have noticed it again didn't go through. I love this though. PS. Thanks again for your assist. hugs!

Joseph May

Date: 6/24/2015 3:23:00 PM

Great write and win ...Congrats

Early Jae

Date: 6/24/2015 8:33:00 AM

Super cool, love the imagery!! Congrats!!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:54:00 AM

Thanks Ea rly.

Skat A

Date: 6/24/2015 1:36:00 AM

Richard, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:20:00 AM

Thanks SKAT.;0)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/24/2015 12:52:00 AM

This is a wonderful win Richard, a sweet way to enjoy the forces of nature. Congrats. LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:21:00 AM

Thanks Linda, you are kind.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2015 9:17:00 PM

this is really great work, Richard. I sure do love the terzanelle and you did it justice. Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:21:00 AM

Thanks I enjoy this form.

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/23/2015 8:52:00 PM

Marvellous, Richard. Well done. Regards, Viv

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Viv.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/23/2015 8:26:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. It's an enjoyable form to write in yes? Light & Love

Jan Allison

Date: 6/23/2015 5:49:00 PM

Many congrats on your win Rick:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/23/2015 5:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win, Rick . Hugs Eve * @-)--< 7

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/23/2015 12:28:00 PM

great pen Rick congrats on placing hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:19:00 AM

Good morning and thanks for picking my poem Shadow.

Anna Hopper

Date: 4/2/2015 8:09:00 AM

Great write! Again!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2015 8:45:00 AM

;0)

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/30/2015 9:57:00 AM

Your creative, descriptive words in this poetic form are gripping! I have yet to do a Terzanelle, and hear you are "the king". I can see why! Amazing, a 7 from me!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/30/2015 10:03:00 AM

You are kind my dear. Thanks as well for the seven.

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 3/21/2015 10:04:00 AM

Another one of your awesome gems. Am glad i clicked on it:-) seven!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/24/2015 5:55:00 AM

Good morning and a big hug and thanks for the seven.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 3/21/2015 5:19:00 AM

Love this, you are so very creative.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/24/2015 5:57:00 AM

Thanks Armand.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/18/2015 9:52:00 PM

What a superb entry this is for the contest Richard. I love the melancholy feel to it. I hope it does well Richard. Hugs, Connie 7 for me.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/19/2015 7:28:00 AM

Thanks for the kind visit, good wishes and the 7 Connie. All are appreciated. ;0)

Abdelwaheb Dhaou

Date: 3/18/2015 1:12:00 PM

A sublime Terzanelle with a caboodle of rich words and above all powerful emotions ! Bravo Richard Lamoureux ! I really elated !

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/19/2015 7:31:00 AM

Thanks Abdelwahe.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/18/2015 10:31:00 AM

Richard....I've missed your Terazanelles. You are the terzanelle king. This is such a powerful write. It's mesmerizing. I love the second stanza. So pretty....and yet so sad. Good luck in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/18/2015 10:37:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, the contest gave me some motivation. Hugs Rick.