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Erosion 1 and 2

Erosion - 1 With a scholar eye I am looking at- Looking at Sharpened Dream, Burning heart burning across Feeling the sour, feeling the layer Is being wet tongue, gradually uncovered vibrating lips and stick while mixing at liquor - A chemical compound searching for eyes - Searching liberty from sin - Burning the recipe of purity I am chewing all the glamour with tortured eyes Breathing fragrance; breathing easily passing days and nights Easily being tortured, told her- As its an erosion ; it’s a feelings Written by Javed Akter Erosion – 2 Sharp Sunshine ; I become anxious sharpened me while it touches the ground Like homeless lives I search forever Blue ; blue feelings always Walking around Always sliding doors are crawling Crawling ever now and then Kindly me; myself kind while waking up After long night sleepless; sleeveless From deadly bed Changing everything; changing backbone slowly Steadily this side and that Every time looking at decay -Decay altering the sides my feelings ; herself towards

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Date: 2/7/2016 1:18:00 AM
JAVED, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 11/11/2015 10:51:00 PM
Javed, ENJOYED.. Stopped by to say hello, I enjoyed reading your poem today. FOREVER <3 SKAT"
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Date: 11/9/2013 1:04:00 PM
Hi, I am a fellow Bangladeshi writer, new in this site. Please check out my poems that I posted here. Please also check out my debut book “The Mystic Inferno”, available in Dhaka’s book stores. Let me know your thoughts. Greatly appreciate that. Regards, Obaidur Rahman
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Date: 6/20/2009 1:47:00 AM
Thanks Crystal and other friends in the poetry soup for inspiring me. For Crystal : I am not that famous Lyricist Javed Akhtar from India, I am from Bangladesh. I usually write Bengali Poems.
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Date: 6/20/2009 12:50:00 AM
This poem is reeli beautiful......!! Classy write....! this shows a great deal of proffesionalism and maturity......International piece of work....!! Condgradzzz.....! by the way javed, r u that famous lyricist from India??
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Date: 6/4/2009 3:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being featured> James
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Date: 6/3/2009 9:29:00 AM
Congrats Javed on being featured this week. Vince
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Date: 5/31/2009 11:57:00 PM
Co ngratulations on your poem being feautred and making it to the semi finals. Ernilando
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Date: 5/31/2009 10:40:00 AM
Javed, Congratulations on having your poem, "Erosion 1 and2" featured this week. Keep writing. Always, Dane"
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Date: 5/17/2009 11:50:00 AM
Hello Javed, great job and best wishes in the next round. ~Joseph
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Date: 5/4/2009 9:45:00 PM
Thanks all for your valuable supports. Hope i can make it more and more.
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Date: 5/3/2009 11:29:00 AM
Javed, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
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Date: 4/22/2009 8:49:00 AM
Good luck in the contest, Javed
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Date: 4/9/2009 7:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it in the semi finals. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals Javed. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/6/2009 1:12:00 AM
Thanks Friends for Your Valuable Support in my writing !! Hope you will post more details comments for me and my poetry.
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Date: 4/5/2009 9:57:00 AM
Javed - Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round, best of luck in the finals – God Bless, MJ
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Date: 4/4/2009 9:40:00 PM
Wow...How very teen angst of you. Listen to The Used much?
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Date: 4/3/2009 11:35:00 AM
Congrats Javed on your enchanting poem winning the First Round at the PoetrySoup. I wish you success in the finals. You are a talented poet. I quote a Quatrain from my book 'Rubaiyat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean': Men who recite their verses profound/ And in their hearts conceal a bleeding wound/ Are insight and vision of worlds beyond/ Those who translate their thoughts in sound. -Mohammad
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Date: 1/13/2009 5:53:00 PM
Very unique!!! Congratulations on your win, Jayed. lainie
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Date: 1/7/2009 4:37:00 PM
Interesting format to share your thoughts in this poem. Congratulations on having it chosen as one of the winners in the contest. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 1/5/2009 6:48:00 PM
Congratulations Javed on being chosen a winner in the September contest. Vince
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Date: 1/5/2009 5:37:00 AM
Congratulations on being a finalist and having your poetry featured. Love Carol
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Date: 1/4/2009 7:34:00 PM
Thanks all for their support and comments.
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Date: 1/4/2009 2:47:00 PM
This was amazing, and well deserved to be among the finalists! Congratulations, Javed!! ~ Carrie
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Date: 1/4/2009 9:37:00 AM
Javed - Seems to me like a double congratulations is in order – A Finalist and a featured poem – Great Job – God Bless, MJ
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